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Mountain Fever

by Celticai

Member since 2008 · Posted 27 Sep 2008 · 9 comments

The wind sends its breath Across my body – my mind – my soul Standing amidst these mountains of time I’m sensitized Energized… Joyous to be alive, wild, and free. My heartbeat accelerates Skin flushes with rosy tones of ardour I tremble and shiver in responsive anticipation. To be at one with the earth spirit that swirls around me Surrounded yet alone Selfish but compliant Finding the summit wondrously. I am on top of the world – a perfect moment in time.

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9 comments

[10] Bethy 29-Sep-08/10:27 AM Reply
perfect! I don't know what to say...I feel like I am sitting on a mountain in Peru. Thank you
[n/a] Celticai › Bethy 29-Sep-08/1:16 PM Reply
If it resonated for you and touched your spirit, I am a very happy person! Thank you.
[7] Ranger 6-Oct-08/4:31 PM Reply
Sort of New Age. Are you a painter?
[n/a] Celticai › Ranger 6-Oct-08/4:57 PM Reply
No I'm not. New Age influence definitely as I'm Wiccan.
[4] nentwined 14-Oct-08/7:12 PM Reply
As someone else wrote on one of your poems--"get out of my head!" Feels very much like something I would have written ten years ago (though I never really went for staircases).

That said, I find a lot of your words redundant (and in such a way as to render their compatriots less powerful). And the piece as a whole is missing some novelty, flow, or something to set it apart from a multitude of poems like it. Perhaps you can make it more personal?
[n/a] Celticai 15-Oct-08/10:30 PM Reply
Thank you Nentwined... I suppose the my verbosity overflows into my poetry. I speak very much as I write - just like Regency Ladies - twittering mindlessly, repetitiously covering the same inadequate sayings endeavouring to get my point across. I appreciate all the comments I receive from others on this site.
[n/a] Celticai 15-Oct-08/10:32 PM Reply
No one has actually commented on the intent of the poem. I've received many talking about the 'nature' of this poem - that it is about landscapes and one-ness with the earth. It was actually about seeking an orgasmic experience.. go figure.
[7] Ranger › Celticai 18-Oct-08/4:56 PM Reply
Then either it's not a very good poem, or we're not very good readers.
[n/a] Celticai 19-Oct-08/12:47 AM Reply
I'd go with not a good poem personally.