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Fear (Free verse) by Phalkon
i lay awake in bed
my heart is pounding painfully
a million thoughts run through my head
my fears begin to forte
i then begin to sweat
the second hand ticks slowly
and i am without rest
the noise outside my door
taps most menacingly
i now begin to wonder
if i'll see the light of day
the door creaks open slowly
a beam lights up my room
a fear i've never known before enters through the door
my teeth begin to chatter
uncontrollably
now only do i realize
fear has control of me!
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Weighted score: 5.851648
Overall Rank: 1567
Posted: May 14, 2004 5:50 AM PDT; Last modified: May 14, 2004 5:50 AM PDT
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The most logical explanation I can come up with is that you're using some kind of obsolete olden verb meaning "to builde a [sofa cushion] fortresse." Is this the case?
At any rate, this conversation was innocent enough until you claimed I hadn't passed the fourth grade three comment-deletions ago. Now I trust you know who is the spanker and who's the spanked? Good. You may delete this comment at your leisure. After this, if you ever delete another of my comments I'll break your legs, punk. Okay? Thanks.
A: interesting how you get your kicks off of "trying" to make yourself seem better than others, even though you obviously are lacking in many personal fields
B: you're the only person who repeatedly tries to find fault with me
C: why haven't you posted anything bad about my newest poem "what's the point?" or does it leave you without possible "witty retort"?
D: i seriously didn't think you'd take it that hard when i said you didn't pass the 4th grade... maybe it just took you more than one try... but at any rate, i'm sorry i hurt your feelings
"zodiac is totally ace" - Steve in Nebraska
"Thar ain't none in these parts what shoots straighter and drinks harder'n that ol' dodger zodiac" - Hank in Montana
"You're beautiful. You'll be a star" - Simon Cowell
"You have the aura of election upon you" - Harold Bloom
And I have many, many more. As far as "you obviously are lacking in many personal fields" goes, please explain.
B: I'm apparently the only one who cares. *glows beatifically*
C: What, indeed, would be the point? At any rate, you haven't posted anything on anyone's poems except your own and one each of dmzoacan's and Blindpoetry's. Why don't you give it a shot?
D: You didn't hurt my feelings, you dimwit. That's not even close to what I said.
E: Thanks.
*claps* okay, i admit Hank in Montana was funny... you salty son of a gun ;)