Re: With a smile and a light heart... by Nepanthe	Garrett S Sexton 81.159.186.162	29-Oct-08/1:20 PM
PUT THIS IN THE TATE MODERN. WHAT ARE YOU ABOUT? IS THIS POEM A MIDDLE AGED NEW YORK FEM? WHERE DOES IT WANT? IF ANY? NOT FOR ME BUT EXPLAIN CAUSE I CANNIE SEE THE COLOUR[COLOR, FOR YOU IN THE U.S.]
Re: WHAT PEOPLE DO by OMOMOMOM	Dovina 208.127.228.57	1-Nov-08/3:17 PM
The first 4 lines open a fine stage to play on. The last 2 lines wrap it up just fine. But whatever falls between needs some major tuning.
Re: Phoenix by Celticai	Dovina 208.127.228.57	1-Nov-08/3:20 PM
Your rebirth is waiting on a lone mountain trail where wanderers like us go to flush the plaque from our arteries and the smoke from our brains. Try it.
Re: One of the guys by hobojo	Dovina 208.127.228.57	1-Nov-08/3:27 PM
This leaves me wondering about several things, and not getting it. Tell me what is wrong with falling in love with a friend, one of the guys or not. Was he really a friend if he did this? What kind of judge of character are you?
Re: Poetic Blue Justice by Dovina	Celticai 58.169.193.236	5-Nov-08/1:33 AM
When I knew that my father was to pass on, I asked him to leave me his handicapped sign in his will.. for situations where you can't find a damn park! I enjoyed this Dovina. Thank you.
Re: butterfly by winniss	Celticai 58.169.193.236	5-Nov-08/1:43 AM
Oh, I've been there!
Re: meta ku? what da fuck is dat? by malpaso	malpaso 70.233.168.206	7-Nov-08/6:08 AM
this poem sucks, is great, or mediocre at best? gimme some feedback, you who are usually so vocal!
Re: The Deepest Depths by chesty82	hobojo 24.143.147.163	10-Nov-08/5:50 PM
You have captured my year...
Re: Fine Line by sliver	Dovina 75.82.253.189	12-Nov-08/1:57 PM
Well put. We get pulled back to mama's knee and mama's beliefs, like a magnet too strong for reason.
Re: i will if i want to by malpaso	Dovina 75.82.253.189	12-Nov-08/1:57 PM
Wonderful
Re: Anorexia is good for the soul by hobojo	Dovina 75.82.253.189	12-Nov-08/1:59 PM
Well not quite. Relate it to a mood or a rash, not to anorexia - that's a disease
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 75.82.253.189	12-Nov-08/2:02 PM
[\!syntactical brine is fine !\] ;)
Re: Poetic Blue Justice by Dovina	malpaso 70.233.164.236	13-Nov-08/8:14 AM
Excellent
Re: Poetic Blue Justice by Dovina	hobojo 24.143.147.163	13-Nov-08/6:24 PM
Karma can really bite
Re: Fine Line by sliver	hobojo 24.143.147.163	13-Nov-08/6:28 PM
Wish I had a sense of my fine line...
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 68.166.131.230	18-Nov-08/4:48 PM
Strange! Love as a choice or a science seems incongruous with romantic notions. Are poets or is love to become an oddity? Maybe both. Maybe when love is a choice or science. Homography of the soul, perhaps where certain points coincide, seems a better kind, where nature of humans and nurture reconcile. I made me think, maybe not as you think, but think, and that makes it good
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 68.166.131.230	18-Nov-08/5:15 PM
If this is about driving across Nevada then it's hilarious in making that doldrum look exciting. But if it's about running, as the last line implies, with coke and coffee breaks then it's about a crazy person.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 68.166.131.230	18-Nov-08/5:20 PM
Line 2 could lose some words I think. Blacks are no more free than before the election, whites are no more choking, and green money is leaking out of pockets, but I like it anyway.
Re: Anorexia is good for the soul by hobojo	Caducus 212.169.1.149	21-Nov-08/8:38 AM
L9-10 I think could be one line 'I'm full on empty' The opening 4-7 lines are strongest, not convinced ont he title but like the idea of making a statement to the boys but it needs something more on that as it could be ? reason for why she/he is starving themselves.
Re: Poetic Blue Justice by Dovina	Caducus 212.169.1.149	21-Nov-08/8:41 AM
Like the meter and form and that S1 and S6 begin and conclude with the message ..... Cant help feeling this is a sandwich though without the filling. Like: leather gloves, handicap blue, lost a leg - more of the character you serve up good images but too sporadically.