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Anorexia is good for the soul (Free verse) by hobojo The recipe
To get over him
A drop kick to the head
Of these feelings
Smashed
Into a million pieces
Rolled into a joint
Smoked for dinner
Dessert?
No thanks, I'm full...
No more boys for a while
Anorexia is good for the soul.
Up the ladder:
Writing the Rings
Down the ladder:
GHOSTS OF HIS FATHERS
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Posted: November 10, 2008 5:49 PM PST; Last modified: November 10, 2008 5:49 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0474257 Overall Rank: 6934 Comments:
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Dovina @ 75.82.253.189
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12-Nov-08/1:59 PM
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Well not quite. Relate it to a mood or a rash, not to anorexia - that's a disease
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hobojo @ 24.143.147.163
> Dovina
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13-Nov-08/6:21 PM
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I was comparing anorexia to an addiction to food and that starvation of this sort would be good for my soul - sorry to use the word offensively if I did so...
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hobojo @ 24.143.147.163
> hobojo
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13-Nov-08/6:22 PM
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Anorexia being the opposite of an addiction to food, an addiction to being thin, which has been a part of my world with this self hate, not being desired blah blah stupid
L9-10 I think could be one line 'I'm full on empty'
The opening 4-7 lines are strongest, not convinced ont he title but like the idea of making a statement to the boys but it needs something more on that as it could be ? reason for why she/he is starving themselves. 178 view(s)
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