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Anorexia is good for the soul (Free verse) by hobojo

The recipe To get over him A drop kick to the head Of these feelings Smashed Into a million pieces Rolled into a joint Smoked for dinner Dessert? No thanks, I'm full... No more boys for a while Anorexia is good for the soul.

Caducus 21-Nov-08/8:38 AM
L9-10 I think could be one line 'I'm full on empty'

The opening 4-7 lines are strongest, not convinced ont he title but like the idea of making a statement to the boys but it needs something more on that as it could be ? reason for why she/he is starving themselves.




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