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Poetic Blue Justice (Free verse) by Dovina He carried a placard, handicap blue
for use when parkingâs tough
He could walk a mile with a heavy load
but why, when he had that sign?
Then, in a wreck, he lost a leg
can still drive, but cannot walk
Thin wheels turn in his leather gloves
from the back of the lot to the front
Past cars in blue slots
signs hanging from mirrors
He carries a placard, handicap blue
for use when parkingâs tough
Up the ladder:
tripped on an eggo
Down the ladder:
The Pedestal And Promised Land
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Posted: November 1, 2008 3:07 PM PDT; Last modified: November 1, 2008 3:07 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.43703 Overall Rank: 3014 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Celticai @ 58.169.193.236
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5-Nov-08/1:33 AM
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When I knew that my father was to pass on, I asked him to leave me his handicapped sign in his will.. for situations where you can't find a damn park! I enjoyed this Dovina. Thank you.
Excellent
Karma can really bite
Like the meter and form and that S1 and S6 begin and conclude with the message .....
Cant help feeling this is a sandwich though without the filling. Like: leather gloves, handicap blue, lost a leg - more of the character you serve up good images but too sporadically.
The beauty of your poem is that it's beautifully simple and It's just great
it's not about your poem
it's about you though oh love... you have no kind of flaw or fault so then we begin to sing and make love everything that s excellent let our hearts just as pure and fair may beat in as one heart 236 view(s)
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