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Poetic Blue Justice (Free verse) by Dovina

He carried a placard, handicap blue for use when parking’s tough He could walk a mile with a heavy load but why, when he had that sign? Then, in a wreck, he lost a leg can still drive, but cannot walk Thin wheels turn in his leather gloves from the back of the lot to the front Past cars in blue slots signs hanging from mirrors He carries a placard, handicap blue for use when parking’s tough

Caducus 21-Nov-08/8:41 AM
Like the meter and form and that S1 and S6 begin and conclude with the message .....

Cant help feeling this is a sandwich though without the filling.

Like: leather gloves, handicap blue, lost a leg - more of the character you serve up good images but too sporadically.




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