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WHAT PEOPLE DO (Free verse) by OMOMOMOM BEAUTY IS A WORLDS DESIRE,
THE DESIRE WE ALL CRAVE,
BUT WHAT IS BEAUTY?,
AND WHY IS IT HERE,
WE ALL DO CRAZY THINGS,
AND I MUST ADMIT SOME ARE CRAZIER THAN OTHERS,
BUT THE WAY SOME PEOPLE CRAVE AND LONG FOR BEAUTY,
WELL IS IS NOT VERY GOOD,
I HAVE HEARD STORIES ABOUT BEAUTY,
NOT NICE ONES AT THAT,
PEOPLE DIED,
PEOPLE GOT INJURED,
PEOPLE GOT DISEASED,
SO DO WE REALLY WANT BEAUTY?,
WHY IS IT HERE?,
WHY DO WE WANT IT SO?.
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Posted: October 28, 2008 1:22 AM PDT; Last modified: October 28, 2008 1:22 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.165413 Overall Rank: 1043 Comments:
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Garrett S Sexton @ 81.159.186.162
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29-Oct-08/1:14 PM
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typo, so a 9 [is is] OH GO ON THEN 10 I OFTEN MAKEA DA MISTAKAAAAAAAAAAAAAA.............
The first 4 lines open a fine stage to play on. The last 2 lines wrap it up just fine. But whatever falls between needs some major tuning.
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