| Re: floss every day by digipoet |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
9-Jan-06/3:21 AM |
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I hope your being sarcastic. If you really think an orderly life is the answer than good luck with that.
As sarcasm I like it.
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| Re: portrait of powerlessness by digipoet |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
9-Jan-06/3:26 AM |
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Do you and LilMsLadyPoet know each other?
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| Re: Bloody Stools 'n' Butterflies by EAger to Offend |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
9-Jan-06/3:32 AM |
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See all of Dark Angel's poems and then realize you're outmatched.
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| Re: The Forgetting by Dovina |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
9-Jan-06/3:40 AM |
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No offence, but somehow, something's missing. The poem's good, but I don't feel the punch as much as I do in some poems.
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
9-Jan-06/4:16 AM |
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When I was checking the charts to find the best, i noted your poem ranking -1. Curiously I read it, and must say, hats off to you! you did a wonderful job on that - barrister or not. Hmmm, now for a hot cup of coffee....please may I have one.
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| Re: Sunlighting by ALChemy |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:00 AM |
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Cute - but no cigar. Where is the content and the grit to this. I think this is written in a lovely way with rich language and soft tones, but I canât find anything that gives me what I look for in a poem, it gives all the traditional things such as elegance and flow.... If I were I scholar in poetry then I would give this a 9 for being well-written, but as myself a 4 since it appears to be pointless (even as just an image there is nothing new, just nice well written poetry), I know Iâm outnumbered 7 to 1 in this opinion, and that Iâm going to embarrass myself somewhere with this comment later on when someone points out the not so hidden meaning, but I canât find the point to this poem. 4 may be harsh, but I consider your work to be in a better league to most on here, and so I'll rate you by the standards you have set with your previous work, rather than the average on this site.
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| Re: A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:05 AM |
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Epitomises an irritating and emetic type of yearning and humbleness that should be replaced with a more dignified form of submission to God.
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| Re: What Matters by Dovina |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:08 AM |
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You do much much better on a regular basis
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| Re: Cocoon by Caducus |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:21 AM |
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Nice ending, not the most seductive or venomous portrayal of an evil woman though.
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| Re: Bloody Stools 'n' Butterflies by EAger to Offend |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:23 AM |
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Too eager to offend, and not eager enougth to produce stimulating poetry.
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| Re: do i know you? by daggatolar |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:28 AM |
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This looks and even sounds like it has a meaning or is expressing something, in fact on 2nd read I think I got it. Like the unrecognizing part, in fact its growing on me, especially now the title. As a poem it is not too hot, but it stimulates and has drawn me in and conjured images and thoughts much more than most poems.
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| Re: portrait of powerlessness by digipoet |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:29 AM |
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| Re: floss every day by digipoet |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
9-Jan-06/6:30 AM |
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Making the peice more repetetive could add to its OCD like content
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| Re: Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT |
<~> 167.206.181.179 |
9-Jan-06/8:01 AM |
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| Re: Bloody Stools 'n' Butterflies by EAger to Offend |
zodiac 209.193.14.113 |
9-Jan-06/8:25 AM |
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| Re: What Matters by Dovina |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67 |
9-Jan-06/8:49 AM |
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This reads like a sentence in a novel to me. I hate to hardcore you like that but, it's flat.
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| Re: Cocoon by Caducus |
<~> 167.206.181.179 |
9-Jan-06/9:15 AM |
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hi Cad,
this one feels like two poems, mostly because of the way you've rhymed the last 2 stanzas. I like the metaphors you use in the first half as well, but then you drop them when you go into love-mode. is there some way you can meld these disparate halves?
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| Re: floss every day by digipoet |
<~> 167.206.181.179 |
9-Jan-06/9:21 AM |
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imagine the follow-your-bliss existence you'd have if you could floss twice?
i likes it.
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| Re: Slaves and their Serpents by cyan9 |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
9-Jan-06/9:23 AM |
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Not my cup of tea. As for the para 1 line 4, you said it! Your confession suits you very well.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
9-Jan-06/9:32 AM |
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