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do i know you? (Free verse) by daggatolar do i know you?
a face is a lie to another face
we only forget to run the memory away
we become mad
and faces on thier own
unrecognise us
Up the ladder:
...
Down the ladder:
the light of a truly bright day
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Posted: January 8, 2006 11:47 AM PST; Last modified: January 8, 2006 11:47 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6738 Comments:
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Dovina @ 209.247.222.97
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8-Jan-06/3:53 PM
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This is good except for Line 2, which can go, I think.
their. Good one.
This looks and even sounds like it has a meaning or is expressing something, in fact on 2nd read I think I got it. Like the unrecognizing part, in fact its growing on me, especially now the title. As a poem it is not too hot, but it stimulates and has drawn me in and conjured images and thoughts much more than most poems.
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