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portrait of powerlessness (Free verse) by digipoet
i bleed draconian sorrow toes trembling fingers forgotten my heart screams to you and at you shame, secrecy, sadism

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8333335
Weighted score: 5.493059
Overall Rank: 2798
Posted: January 8, 2006 9:20 PM PST; Last modified: January 9, 2006 9:09 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 9-Jan-06/3:26 AM | Reply
Do you and LilMsLadyPoet know each other?
[n/a] digipoet @ 71.82.119.230 > ALChemy | 9-Jan-06/7:15 PM | Reply
hmmm. no i don't maybe I should though I'll check out her poems.
[7] cyan9 @ 217.40.63.105 | 9-Jan-06/6:29 AM | Reply
Venomous
[6] Nicholas Jones @ 86.135.254.59 | 9-Jan-06/11:59 AM | Reply
This one actually has some interesting writing, though your last line is entirely superfluous.
[n/a] digipoet @ 71.82.119.230 > Nicholas Jones | 9-Jan-06/7:14 PM | Reply
yeah it retrospect i agree the last line is kind of pointless...i guess i thought it was needed to emphasize the others actions towards the subject but it is already clear enough. thx.
[7] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 9-Jan-06/8:37 PM | Reply
Try leaving off the last line, or make it the title.
[n/a] digipoet @ 71.82.119.230 > Dovina | 9-Jan-06/8:55 PM | Reply
hmmm i already took off the line "why did you render me thus" but i can see your point too! thx
[9] PoeticXTC @ 205.188.116.139 | 9-Jan-06/9:14 PM | Reply
The History of Tyranny or is that tyrany???!!!!! Lmao!
[7] cyan9 @ 217.40.63.105 | 10-Jan-06/1:28 AM | Reply
Didn't like ending on the word sadism, would have voted [8-9] if the last line was secrecy, sadism, shame
[8] LilMsLadyPoet @ 152.163.100.65 | 11-Jan-07/7:04 PM | Reply
I think spelling it out with sadism was too obvious, some other word or earlier phrase to indicate that type of relationship would have been more refined. But perhaps you wanted to be blunt and state the thing that it is...but then you lose the complexity of it and apply a label for it.
Hello, everybody, I'm Back:)
As per my way, I will vote, post and then go see what you all had to say about this little piece.
[8] LilMsLadyPoet @ 152.163.100.65 | 11-Jan-07/7:15 PM | Reply
I see you, Alchemy have not forgotten the one you were so venomous and combative toward...what, did you miss the sparring? It is rather amusing our scores matched...I am surprised.
I do not know this person and this person does not know me. I logged on and searched my name...and at the top of the list was Alchemy mentioning me at this poem.
digipoet...it was a nice entrance to find this poem. I disagree with dropping the entire last line. How about Safety, as the last word? something that wraps it all up and binds it together...no pun intended.
[8] LilMsLadyPoet @ 152.163.100.13 > LilMsLadyPoet | 11-Jan-07/8:00 PM | Reply
Oh, Crap! I am soooo sorry ALChemy, I was thinking of Zodiac when I posted the comment! If I knew you personally I would treat you to a fantastic steak dinner to make up that blunder of blunders! I know who you are and I am so sorry!(Profusely regretful...and as you know, I am rarely regretful and rarely profuse toward another:) Please accept my virtual steak and bottle of whatever pleases you, and know you have my respect.

Zodiac...have your fun, as I know you will when you read the post. I insist- but remember, I told you to.

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