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portrait of powerlessness (Free verse) by digipoet

i bleed draconian sorrow toes trembling fingers forgotten my heart screams to you and at you shame, secrecy, sadism

LilMsLadyPoet 11-Jan-07/7:04 PM
I think spelling it out with sadism was too obvious, some other word or earlier phrase to indicate that type of relationship would have been more refined. But perhaps you wanted to be blunt and state the thing that it is...but then you lose the complexity of it and apply a label for it.
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