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The Weight of Words and the Meaning in the Wind (Free verse) by somemorepoetry
Under the traintracks
By an old box of Marlboro's
I'll find something to read
There's a story through the thunder
That I'm dying to tell
Except that I'm a close whisper
Cowering with these pictures
Painted on my mind
By summers when we were
Tall grass
Waving in the wind
Easy and free
Now I feel heavy
Beneath these stones
A single blade curling
Through gravel
Towards the shaking day
With a shovel
I'll find you
Going downward
Since you cannot see
Don't sit quiet there
Laugh when I tell a joke
Cry when I say something sad
There's nothing in a story
Unless you react
We'll grow together
Until these tracks crack and fall apart
Then we'll be free again
Swaying softly
Letting our stories
Be the wind
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Weighted score: 5.493059
Overall Rank: 2767
Posted: February 4, 2004 6:56 PM PST; Last modified: February 4, 2004 6:56 PM PST
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When I read your poem, I went "Oh God", and farted.
But it was then when you told the story "through the thunder" was right about the time that I realized... We've made love in our past life... If not several hundred times. Like the incessant rain pounding the dusty gravel of the high desert. Bringing the dry river beds to a seething surge of brown flood water with swimming animals and drunk people standing on the hoods of their cars.