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The Weight of Words and the Meaning in the Wind (Free verse) by somemorepoetry

Under the traintracks By an old box of Marlboro's I'll find something to read There's a story through the thunder That I'm dying to tell Except that I'm a close whisper Cowering with these pictures Painted on my mind By summers when we were Tall grass Waving in the wind Easy and free Now I feel heavy Beneath these stones A single blade curling Through gravel Towards the shaking day With a shovel I'll find you Going downward Since you cannot see Don't sit quiet there Laugh when I tell a joke Cry when I say something sad There's nothing in a story Unless you react We'll grow together Until these tracks crack and fall apart Then we'll be free again Swaying softly Letting our stories Be the wind

Bachus 4-Feb-04/8:42 PM
When I read your title, I went "Oh God".

When I read your poem, I went "Oh God", and farted.

But it was then when you told the story "through the thunder" was right about the time that I realized... We've made love in our past life... If not several hundred times. Like the incessant rain pounding the dusty gravel of the high desert. Bringing the dry river beds to a seething surge of brown flood water with swimming animals and drunk people standing on the hoods of their cars.




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