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god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
9-Feb-06/7:51 PM |
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This is written a little too simplisticly. It's uninteresting. Do you really feed your children biscuits, toast, jam, cheese and crackers at tea-time?!
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| Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic |
god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
9-Feb-06/7:53 PM |
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The last two lines are excellent. I have to think about the rest. What's 'kindling homes'?
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| Re: Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick |
drnick 24.176.22.254 |
9-Feb-06/8:28 PM |
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I've begun to notice that everyone else on here puts a lot more time and effort into their poems than I do(I usually spend an hour/poem), and I don't think it's fair to ask your advice on something I haven't really worked on myself. The stuff I write is just crap, I mean take this poem: how pathetic is my imagry...did you even know I was attemping to have some imagry?-It's that bad. You guys all write some amazing poetry, and I'm sorry for asking you all to do my work for me.
I will now pledge to work harder on my writing, although I have little time with classes, so that I can produce work that is of substance. I thank you all for being so kind and generous with your advice.
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| Re: sick and demented by sk8boardandpoems |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/8:42 PM |
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| Re: Mask by sk8boardandpoems |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/8:45 PM |
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poop, its................poop
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| Re: if only you could read my mind love by sk8boardandpoems |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/8:50 PM |
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Crutch ha poor bastard! Girls don't think desperateness is attractive. I hope you didn't give this to her. 3 hey its better than the other two I read
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| Re: No One by sk8boardandpoems |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/8:54 PM |
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If you had something more than whining I would have given you a better score
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| Re: You by sk8boardandpoems |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/8:59 PM |
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A little more content, your quote unquote poems do seem more on the demented side like you have big issues with people leaving you and you want to kill them.........thats what i get from this
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| Re: The Call of Duty by waltfreakinwhitman |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:03 PM |
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It is the worst shit I have ever read
I give you a 10 and a lollipop maybe no scratch the lollipop
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| Re: Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:09 PM |
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| Re: Perversions 8: The Reckoning by razorgrin |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:12 PM |
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oh god the negrophelia on oh humanity, 10
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| Re: Perversions 8: The Reckoning by razorgrin |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:12 PM |
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oh god the necrophelia one oh the humanity, 10
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| Re: Going Away to Fight a War by wilco |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
9-Feb-06/9:14 PM |
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Hi wilco, I haven't seen you around much. Probably it's because I too have't been so possessed by this site lately. This is a good piece, and if you say it's country then it definitely fits. I can't imagine putting rock or reggae into it as I have a strong aversion for the two. You definitely have a knack for writing lyrics. Hats off to you.
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| Re: I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:16 PM |
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Im sorry, but if I knew you I would mention it really
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| Re: Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:19 PM |
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| Re: A Short Letter by Ranger |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:23 PM |
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| Re: Faith on a cross by Caducus |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:27 PM |
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That was good I like the visuals I get from this
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| Re: My Fatherâs World by Dovina |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:30 PM |
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This is nice I like the way you write
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| Re: Racism 4 by Dovina |
Glasseyez 204.49.132.59 |
9-Feb-06/9:32 PM |
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| Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
9-Feb-06/9:37 PM |
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Alchemy, I didn't quite fit in with the first verse. It was rather deceptive. I thought you were praying to God your Father, and that's when I got into the second verse. It go me off balance suddenly or rather off guard. It's written well though, if it's to your parents.
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