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No One (Other) by sk8boardandpoems
Silence around me no one to tell, trapped in a box no one to help, Bleeding from my arm no one to care, Put in a cage no one to see, looked at by thousands no one to look back, Hair falling out no one to show, dying here slowly no one here to watch, lying on the ground no one to grab, pondering why im here no one to answer, crying here by myself no one to cry on, confused with my thoughts no one to know, Tangled with thoughs and questions no one to help, Confused and alone no one by me, No one around me no one to care no one here no one left no one to love no one to recieve love no one to ask no one to .......Answer

Up the ladder: Full Moon in Sagittarius
Down the ladder: Zen

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.076923
Weighted score: 4.3251767
Overall Rank: 13114
Posted: February 25, 2003 5:08 AM PST; Last modified: February 25, 2003 5:08 AM PST
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[5] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 25-Feb-03/8:49 PM | Reply
When i was a young man growing up in southern ca. i skated with gator, and lance mountain a lot, but they did not write poetry this profound, but if they did think about all of the great tricks that would of never been invented. Perhaps you juggle? This poem has a long way to go, but you have to start somewhere i guess. What's your problem with razora? You are aware that in the writing spectrum she out classes you horribly, right? I don't think this deserves a zero, so here's a five.
[0] razorgrin @ 192.197.141.39 > horus8 | 26-Feb-03/9:52 AM | Reply
Thank you, horus, you're such a flattering muffin.
[n/a] sk8boardandpoems @ 24.167.109.182 > horus8 | 26-Feb-03/4:17 PM | Reply
Yes i am aware that she is better than me but that does not intimidate me(if it was meant to) i am once again just starting out! i'll take your comments into concideration and work on it
[0] razorgrin @ 198.164.251.171 > sk8boardandpoems | 26-Feb-03/5:36 PM | Reply
All I ask is that you view me as your one true goddess.
[n/a] sk8boardandpoems @ 24.167.109.182 > razorgrin | 27-Feb-03/1:44 PM | Reply
Ummmmm no i will view u as one of my higher superiors but not as a goddess
[0] razorgrin @ 142.166.0.242 > sk8boardandpoems | 7-Mar-03/1:14 PM | Reply
Fair enough.
[9] XxRuby_KillsXx @ 67.180.80.13 | 31-Jul-04/11:53 AM | Reply
that was a good poem...
[10] forsaken @ 158.136.148.162 | 10-Apr-05/1:24 PM | Reply
I've ment someone who skated and wrote poems before, up in Maine. When I was going to school, I doubt it, but I wonder could that be you. She also was angeered by the refrence of being like Avril. That aside I do like this poem if that what you'd like to call it. Maybe more like a quick shoot of your mind set at the time. Maybe something longer about how it feels to be alone, without anyone to fill some of that emptiness inside.
[2] Glasseyez @ 204.49.132.59 | 9-Feb-06/8:54 PM | Reply
If you had something more than whining I would have given you a better score
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