does this make sense? The passion you pretended was precociously to obtain

oh dear

fuck, it should say "you need to lose.", not "you need to loose."

Very good last line and first verse

sophisticated

I think that comma should be a semicolon. The poem will still be real shitty, but at least it will look better.

This is ungrammatical and very poorly written. The punctuation is bad as well. If I were rude I would say it stinks. It stinks.

This shows some promise but its content is far outweighed by its length. Edit, edit and then edit again.

Quite nice really. Innocent and charming. Like me.

Nicely written but a little too sentmental for me. I would have given it 9/10 except for the spelling mistake.... "Goodby" doesn't exist. The plural of goodbye is goodbyes

Sloppy shit but a very funny ending. I pissed my pants at that.

Slop.

Lovely.

I don't really understand much of this which is somewhat in keeping with the title. Living in Cambridge myself it is a nice place to go, which is quite comprehensibile which is why it is incomprehensible in a poem that seems to be supposed to be incomprehensible if you see what I mean.

Soothingly introspective, the lines You can only slow a force of nature. Like an avalanche arrive in the chaos. broke away from that soothing tone somewhat and whilst I see their necessity I cant precislely put my finger on it, but there is something that stops me giving this a 10 within those lines.

Interesting narrative but a cop-out ending.

A bit Lenny Cohen-ny!

What a charming little tale. It reminds me of my late husband Bert. He would often get home late at night reeking of cheap aftershave after some nameless activities in the park with his bumboy friends.

Crap.

You bumboy friends will have a rough passage.