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Old Friends (Free verse) by sliver A single star
Cradled in a crescent moon.
Shedding a light
More silver than blue.
A wedding tomorrow.
Will that star still be there?
Is it some kind of omen
For the love they share.
It's funny how
I can see it from here,
How they come together,
In the heavens without fear.
I'll be watching tonight
To see if they meet again.
To cradle like lovers
Or kiss like old friends.
Up the ladder:
Paranoia & the thinnest curtain
Down the ladder:
Help The Aged
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.069307
Posted: May 21, 2004 12:40 PM PDT; Last modified: May 21, 2004 12:42 PM PDTWeighted score: 7.069307 Overall Rank: 23 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.16
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21-May-04/8:10 PM
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good poem, i wish them well as well
beautifully expression.
glad to see your poetry again
Great flow of words..
Rump
I really like this poem..Nuff said.
Old Rearends By Captain Napkin
A wedding mannana Somewhere in Rowanda The groom has AIDS As Uranus fades Away, yadda yadda yadda.
very very nice
Beautiful poem. :)
Well! Obviously you no longer need my help. Fine work.
Just luck, as I'm sure you know.
I think the poem was nicely writen!
It sucks; I hate it. But if it's any consolation, the title was just as shitty as the poem.
Lol
I thought this poem was absolutely great!
I really like this poem and anyone who says anything bad about it is just jealous because none of their stuff is as good.
nice, very nice. :)
Thank you, that means alot to me.
Great poem I love it!!!!!!!!!!
OK...so why did you say I gave you a zero when imnotgoodatpoetry did???? Whats up with that Sliver? I GAVE you a ten....
This is an excellent poem.
ehhh its alright I give it a five :)
I know poetry used to have all first line capitals, but
I feel it lends to the flow if second lines are in small case.
Intranet, may I point out that I got scolded for having made no useful criticism - ie, great work, etal.
This poem has no constructive criticism at all. No big deal, but I thought about what you said and have been critiquing to help because I thought praise was not acceptable comment. Peace!
A bit dull.
Quite nice really. Innocent and charming. Like me.
Not at all bad. Well done!
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