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Old Friends (Free verse) by sliver
A single star Cradled in a crescent moon. Shedding a light More silver than blue. A wedding tomorrow. Will that star still be there? Is it some kind of omen For the love they share. It's funny how I can see it from here, How they come together, In the heavens without fear. I'll be watching tonight To see if they meet again. To cradle like lovers Or kiss like old friends.

Up the ladder: Into My World
Down the ladder: Wait To Answer

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.23
Weighted score: 7.23
Overall Rank: 18
Posted: May 21, 2004 12:40 PM PDT; Last modified: May 21, 2004 12:42 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.16 | 21-May-04/8:10 PM | Reply
good poem, i wish them well as well
[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 216.196.147.170 | 21-May-04/11:53 PM | Reply
beautifully expression.
[9] tadpole @ 24.55.114.92 | 22-May-04/9:42 PM | Reply
glad to see your poetry again
[10] arduinn @ 165.21.83.230 | 17-Jun-04/1:19 AM | Reply
Great flow of words..
[0] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 17-Jun-04/12:30 PM | Reply
Rump
[10] Brittanyy @ 205.188.116.141 | 11-Jul-04/8:24 AM | Reply
I really like this poem..Nuff said.
[0] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 | 14-Jul-04/12:33 PM | Reply
Old Rearends By Captain Napkin


A wedding mannana
Somewhere in Rowanda
The groom has AIDS
As Uranus fades
Away, yadda yadda
yadda.
[10] donmiguel1960 @ 68.96.168.211 | 16-Jul-04/9:05 AM | Reply
very very nice
[9] TearsOnRoses @ 66.73.129.89 | 18-Jul-04/7:37 AM | Reply
Beautiful poem. :)
[10] INTRANSIT @ 149.174.164.15 | 20-Jul-04/8:09 AM | Reply
Well! Obviously you no longer need my help. Fine work.
[n/a] sliver @ 63.189.16.149 > INTRANSIT | 22-Jul-04/3:23 PM | Reply
Just luck, as I'm sure you know.
[10] x0lovelylarnx0 @ 64.12.116.140 | 20-Jul-04/7:31 PM | Reply
I think the poem was nicely writen!
[0] leonxic @ 80.205.204.53 | 3-Aug-04/5:51 AM | Reply
It sucks; I hate it. But if it's any consolation, the title was just as shitty as the poem.
[0] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > leonxic | 8-Sep-04/12:04 PM | Reply
Lol
[10] redneck_woman3322 @ 216.129.235.132 | 20-Sep-04/2:10 PM | Reply
I thought this poem was absolutely great!
[10] Brittanyy @ 152.163.100.135 | 2-Feb-05/9:00 AM | Reply
I really like this poem and anyone who says anything bad about it is just jealous because none of their stuff is as good.
[9] pinay_miss_azn @ 69.143.184.30 | 21-Jun-05/6:51 PM | Reply
nice, very nice. :)
[n/a] sliver @ 172.191.199.172 > pinay_miss_azn | 30-Jun-05/10:24 PM | Reply
Thank you, that means alot to me.
[10] Heather Dee @ 63.17.38.111 | 7-Sep-05/1:14 AM | Reply
Great poem I love it!!!!!!!!!!
[10] deleted user @ 207.200.116.65 | 13-Oct-05/5:07 PM | Reply
OK...so why did you say I gave you a zero when imnotgoodatpoetry did???? Whats up with that Sliver? I GAVE you a ten....
[10] deleted user @ 204.97.18.86 | 10-Dec-05/4:13 PM | Reply
This is an excellent poem.
[5] veggiegurl @ 198.68.29.134 | 24-Dec-05/4:16 PM | Reply
ehhh its alright I give it a five :)
[7] Sisterwolf @ 207.69.138.7 | 28-Dec-05/7:22 PM | Reply
I know poetry used to have all first line capitals, but
I feel it lends to the flow if second lines are in
small case.
[7] Sisterwolf @ 207.69.138.7 | 28-Dec-05/7:26 PM | Reply
Intranet, may I point out that I got scolded for having made no useful criticism - ie, great work, etal.
This poem has no constructive criticism at all.
No big deal, but I thought about what you said and
have been critiquing to help because I thought praise
was not acceptable comment. Peace!
[6] Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.117.218 | 15-May-06/4:43 PM | Reply
A bit dull.
[7] Engelbert Humpalot @ 194.154.22.54 | 10-Aug-06/10:14 AM | Reply
Quite nice really. Innocent and charming. Like me.
[7] Engelbert Humpalot @ 194.154.22.54 | 21-Aug-06/9:55 AM | Reply
Not at all bad. Well done!
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