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Reminder of Failure (Lyric) by Miggy
Lost in surprise Just opening the eyes I’m taken to reality Beneath the lies With unsuccessful tries Can’t bear to think what’s left for me (Chorus) The memory fade All you gave Broken piece by piece A wild disease --------------------------- Always wanted more but found too less My passion gone, nothing left to feel And with once my only drive to success Is now my reminder of failure Nothing to show I’m sitting own my own Never thought you were my friend Tension unwound But still not safe nor sound It’s playing though my head again (Chorus) (Bridge) No cure or medicine To forgive every sin Haunting me forever Nothing kept together (Chorus ending)

Up the ladder: hard as a rock
Down the ladder: I've lost my poetic edge

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.2352943
Weighted score: 6.9688406
Overall Rank: 117
Posted: May 3, 2003 4:44 PM PDT; Last modified: May 3, 2003 4:44 PM PDT
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[7] deleted user @ 162.84.177.150 | 3-May-03/6:11 PM | Reply
Not bad - Not great. The title goes well with the lyrics. Sometimes certain words that were meant to rhyme didn't. It's hard to explain -- it's like you tried a little to hard to rhyme in didn't come through. Good overall -7-
[6] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.6.93 | 11-Aug-06/12:08 PM | Reply
A bit Lenny Cohen-ny!
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