| Re: I want to slit my wrist and call it poetry by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.255.83 |
26-Aug-06/4:41 PM |
|
Why not slit your throat and call it justice?
|
|
|
 |
| regarding some deleted poem... |
Ranger 86.137.108.181 |
27-Aug-06/12:13 PM |
|
I like the first stanza a lot, but the second was sort of predictable. I don't really know what to suggest; this probably does the job that you intended, I'm just not feeling anything much from st. 2
|
|
|
|
| Re: With Old Light by Ranger |
Dovina 63.199.240.113 |
27-Aug-06/12:23 PM |
|
So many images and comparisons, it's mind-numbing. Some of them make sense to me, some are supurb, and some seem parenthetic or vague. I'd prefer more development before moving quickly to another metaphor. Perhaps just one main metaphor per verse, with variations on it.
|
|
|
|
| Re: How To Ride a Bicycle by Dovina |
Nicholas Jones 86.135.241.142 |
27-Aug-06/12:34 PM |
|
This is nice, I guess. Though you're wrong about clipless pedals, they are a fantastic invention.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Preserves for the basement (Poe Poetry) by Bachus |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 66.108.184.20 |
27-Aug-06/2:55 PM |
|
|
|
| Re: Drink and Swirl by MacFrantic |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.222.197 |
28-Aug-06/1:18 AM |
|
Odd but oddly beguiling. What's a picket fence?
|
|
|
|
| Re: Quatrain by ALChemy |
zodiac 152.18.20.202 |
28-Aug-06/3:29 PM |
|
Sic volo, sic jubeo, stet pro ratione voluntas.
|
|
|
|
| Re: fish eye pie by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:34 AM |
|
Had you thought of seeing a doctor? Especially one who believes in involuntary euthanasia?
|
|
|
|
| Re: fastbreaker by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:35 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: just a thought by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:35 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: miss drunk muffet by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:36 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: trained by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:37 AM |
|
not very good - dreadful spelling and grammar. I'll be kind and give it 1/10.
|
|
|
|
| Re: typography by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:37 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: zimp by calliope |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:38 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: Today I blew yet another Jew. by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:40 AM |
|
This is a work of fucking genius. You are nearly as fine a writer as I am. 9/10 because I am feeling happy having just had a good wank.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Army Dock (Bangcock in July) (Free Curse) by Rug by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:41 AM |
|
Had youn thought of drying out? 7/10 for freakery.
|
|
|
|
| Re: MENSA's For Fags Like Me by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:42 AM |
|
This is total shit. I just read 2 of your bits and they were OK but now you've descended to this shit I expect of people lile Horus8.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Ack Bassward, or something like that by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.206.129 |
29-Aug-06/7:43 AM |
|
Spoiled by the last line.
|
|
|
|
| Re: On the subject of being poor by Stephen Robins |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.213.50 |
29-Aug-06/10:58 AM |
|
This is a very nice poem. How true, how true. Why Colleen? I thought Sharon was more traditional.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Muff by Stephen Robins |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.213.50 |
29-Aug-06/10:59 AM |
|
Very high class indeed. Who's Michael Stipe?
|
|
|
|
