Edna Sweetlove
on just a thought by calliope
29 Aug 2006, 7:35 AM
Total crap.
illiterate
total and utter garbage
This is a very nice poem. How true, how true. Why Colleen? I thought Sharon was more traditional.
Very high class indeed. Who's Michael Stipe?
Had you thought of seeing a doctor? Especially one who believes in involuntary euthanasia?
Pathetic.
hilariously bad.
not very good - dreadful spelling and grammar. I'll be kind and give it 1/10.
This is a work of fucking genius. You are nearly as fine a writer as I am. 9/10 because I am feeling happy having just had a good wank.
Edna Sweetlove
on Army Dock (Bangcock in July) (Free Curse) by Rug by <{Baba^Yaga}>
29 Aug 2006, 7:41 AM
Had youn thought of drying out? 7/10 for freakery.
This is total shit. I just read 2 of your bits and they were OK but now you've descended to this shit I expect of people lile Horus8.
Spoiled by the last line.
Edna Sweetlove
on I want to slit my wrist and call it poetry by thepinkbunnyofdoom
26 Aug 2006, 4:41 PM
Why not slit your throat and call it justice?
I like the first stanza a lot, but the second was sort of predictable. I don't really know what to suggest; this probably does the job that you intended, I'm just not feeling anything much from st. 2
So many images and comparisons, it's mind-numbing. Some of them make sense to me, some are supurb, and some seem parenthetic or vague. I'd prefer more development before moving quickly to another metaphor. Perhaps just one main metaphor per verse, with variations on it.
This is nice, I guess. Though you're wrong about clipless pedals, they are a fantastic invention.
http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=8765027362024464164&;q=chris+morris
Odd but oddly beguiling. What's a picket fence?