Re: The Ice Soldier by MacFrantic	Ranger 86.140.66.105	13-Sep-06/10:17 PM
Good grief, Mac - I looked up to see a gathering of 5 users online...4 of which are you! New record, methinks. How's Colorado?
Re: Flea poem by Sing4Jesus!	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.237.83	14-Sep-06/10:27 AM
Charming.
Re: a limerick from kent by nentwined	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.237.83	14-Sep-06/10:28 AM
This is not a Limerick. And you are illiterate.
Re: Dear Maggie by Stephen Robins	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.237.83	14-Sep-06/10:29 AM
Which part of Mr Blessed? His arsehole? Or his face?
Re: Upon meeting Mrs Gunn at the Butchers by Mr Pig	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.237.83	14-Sep-06/10:30 AM
I disagree. About as funny as rheumatism.
Re: When I look inside my heart by Engelbert Humpalot	some deleted user 84.65.26.28	14-Sep-06/11:09 AM
yuk @ gorgonzola, am more of a mascarpone girl myself.
Re: To be alive by nightowl	Dovina 12.72.42.250	14-Sep-06/11:32 AM
A greeting card kind of poem. It seems too oversaid to be impressive.
Re: weather poem part 8: stating the obvious by nypoet22	Dovina 12.72.42.250	14-Sep-06/11:36 AM
Line 2 seems grammically wrong, otherwise great.
Re: Kristi's Quiescence by matt door	nypoet22 65.9.114.211	14-Sep-06/6:33 PM
seems a bit distant. i like the form and flow, but i don't get any depth of feel for the object of the poem. it might help to expound upon some of her physical features.
Re: Jose Streets by SupremeDreamer	Dovina 12.72.43.180	14-Sep-06/7:58 PM
There’s something about a man writing his own story, honestly and as he sees it, that comes across uninteresting. We want the twist of phrase, the poetry, the stimulating possibilities. We don’t want what’s actually there. You gave us poetry with “dark inebriated sleep,” but took, for the most part the known road. Good job.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	Ranger 86.131.48.32	14-Sep-06/10:18 PM
Really, this poem is an explanation of the origin of the phrase 'fucking hell'.
Re: Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina	Ranger 86.131.48.32	14-Sep-06/10:21 PM
Nice. I read this yesterday, unfortunately having spent the day shifting vegetables so the mental image of tender, brave sprouts was hilarious. Now I'm a bit more with it, I can appreciate it.
Re: don't touch me 2 by elderking	Dovina 12.72.43.131	15-Sep-06/10:10 AM
There's just enough here to show an unclear scene. Only one thing I would omit: "from willful hand," because it's repeat as far as I can tell. You might want to let us in on a little more of what's going on.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.43.131	15-Sep-06/10:14 AM
I think it would be more compelling and less arogant-sounding, to show this scene from a narrator's viewpoint. Also, the repeating "this man" and "that man" could be just him or he.
Re: Prayer by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.188.163	15-Sep-06/7:34 PM
Beautiful
Re: Doubt by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.228	15-Sep-06/7:39 PM
D. Not very impressiveor. I've been reading this many times to come up with something constructive... but some how can't relate to it as you might like...sorry.
Re: Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.228	15-Sep-06/7:43 PM
This is much better than your previous post. Anybody I know?
Re: Prayer by amanda_dcosta	half.italian 70.36.242.152	15-Sep-06/10:29 PM
I dont particularly like God poems. But this one is good. It reads better if you get rid of "would I call on him" and "quenching" and "torrents of love and grace" IMHO
Re: Morning Glory by moyah8	half.italian 70.36.242.152	15-Sep-06/10:35 PM
Meaningless dribble.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 70.36.242.152	15-Sep-06/10:38 PM
interesting.