oh just kill yourself and give us a break

yak far to much blood i feel like chucking,OH i did.

this pome just has no rhythm

now this pome has got it, I could see every thing. Well done.9/10

http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=46373 'nuff said?

u all are stupid fucktards, yea yea, fuck my grammer and my spelling, listen poetry is MEANINGLESS without feeling, without feeling its just a bunch of crap if its happy or sad it needs feeling, just because u think they r sum "angsty teenager" doesn't mean they I mean u don't kno them for christs sake, so b4 u fucking judge ppl get to kno them, most "angsty teenagers" write that shit because its a stress relever(like I said fuck my spelling, I don't give a fuck u can blow it out ur ass) it helps u get past sumtin thats goin on or sumtin that pissed u off, if u have no reason to write what ur writeing or no feelings in it then its just a load of bullshit

howbout....nah, I think I'll pass howbout u go blow it out ur ass and think bout wht u siad, ur gonna keep doin that shit (tellin ppl to go kill themselves) ur gonna have many pplz blood on ur hands, on of these days that one sentnce will push sumone to kill themself, then u won't b sayin that shit, personaly, I couldn't care weather or nt u or ne one else liked my poetry, I put it here to see wht ppl thought but not to b told to kill myself

Everyone, who are you to judge what is poetry and what is not? You are not a poetry god, you do not know everything. In fact, you know nothing. Obviously, you don't know what it's like to be a teenager, or don't remember.(In other words, you must be pretty old) You may call it angst, but sometimes it can just be downright painful. Also,this is more aimed towards people who feel that they are being fakes,feigning happiness when in reality they're just depressed. I know this, seeing as I'm one of those people. Maybe you think it's horrible, because you can't relate to it. You are being entirely too harsh. This may not be something by Robert Frost, or e.e.cummings, but that doesn't make it horrible. She is an amateur.And I don't say that in a mean way, only in the true sense. Everyone has to start somewhere, and this is a good beginning. I'm sure your first few works weren't a masterpiece, therefore you shouldn't expect everyone else's to be. And while constructive criticism is helpful, what you're doing is just making her feel like she'll never want to write again. So back the fuck off.

I must agree with everyone. this sets new perimeters to cliche poetry, and very well could be the secret missing formula. But the line "sweet snacks of out get together". made me laugh and itch ring worm.

Celibate. Otherwise it's all good.

that made little-to-no sense to my eyes, great

confusing as hell

sweet dude

Jesus, your end chucks it? It was great until the last two lines? Do I have to teach you how to end a poem?

this is trite and elementary, sorry but you get at least a 4 for solid structure

hmmm, solid concrete not sure what you are trying to say though still, it's good in what it is

cute

not a sonnet, sorry

Terrible, angsty bullcrap. No attempt to actually write poetry, just a series of melodramatic sentences and linebreaks where full stops should go. You probably dream of horsies at night. BUT SCARY HORSIES WITH BLACK WINGS OF HATRED, RIGHT?

I just want to say I wrote this poem, mainly to tell my girlfriend how I feel about her. So please if you comment try not to make it negative, because This poem was written from the heart and like my emotions for her are strong.