Engelbert Humpalot
on Poemranker is Back! by Dovina
31 Dec 2020, 11:22 AM
Fucking useless
Boring tripe.
Dreary piffle. I could shit a better poem.
For all the comments you have left here in the past few days, most of them finding some good, refusing to inflict a harsh remark, I wish you finding stars in dark skies, finding love that holds, and find the "you" you are looking for.
Judging from link link in your comment, I think that repetition in your poem refers to musical repetition. Otherwise, I would be drawn to assembly lines or women who don't listen and simply repeat themselves. And what is the product of the musical repetition? You don't say.
Frost says, "and many miles before I sleep"
"and many miles before I sleep"
and that works for me.
It changes the doer, revises his attitude.
Lovely use of the word hangles (to hang from a hook...)
I would remove the comma between lighthouse and clutching- no comma needed. Beautiful poem. Really well done.
Evocative. Loneliness saturates the poem.
nice conceit!
I think the rocketship Almost took off but failed. Liked the concrete imagery.
Enjoyed the humor!
its- no apostrophe in this case.
In the first stanza, I'd recommend dropping all the periods except for the last one in that stanza.
Cutesy. I see this poem as "a product of repetition".
A work of great genius! I have often shat on a bedmate in my excitement on discovering they had 2 anuses.
you meant: make them ask why (typo on them)
Silly!
a few spelling errors, all minor: handful, rescind, water's
I have a poem that happens to use some of the same imagery of the rocks! Kind of neat! I will post it. It is titled Gathering Stones. Please do look at it!
one small spelling error: briefly
Like the connection between auger (to drill the hole into the ice so he can fish, and the idea of AUGUR, soothsaying, and omens.
Love how you show the Inuit in 2 worlds at once, the world of spirit and augury, and the physical world, and the connection between the 2. Suggest changing the title to The Inuit and the fish! Favorite lines: whiteness of time (double meaning); GREAT line: "small of fish bruised and burled. Love the last line with its double meaning: "who expect nothing more." Well done.
Really liked the second stanza, relates so beautifully to the title, creates an amazing picture of the diseased eye.
Sweet!
Could not picture what was flashing ruby fright. A cop car?
Not clear enough to me, some nice imagery there.
liked your Eskimo and Fish poem much more, used many of the same lines and ideas.