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Refulgent (Free verse) by INTRANSIT Deep in the southern hemisphere
a lighthouse, clutching earth
touches space.
Its Fresnal lenses
have fallen away
and the strobe hangles
with a million candela
splintering the universe.
Up the ladder:
It Is About
Down the ladder:
The Well
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Posted: June 18, 2003 7:16 AM PDT; Last modified: June 18, 2003 8:00 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.6915636 Overall Rank: 1965 Comments:
yeah...ok
Pinkie could kick your ass. and he's only got 3 years on ya.
Lovely use of the word hangles (to hang from a hook...)
I would remove the comma between lighthouse and clutching- no comma needed. Beautiful poem. Really well done. 282 view(s)
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I'm at the bottom of the page, laughing.