Jill Stockinger
on Tennessee by wilco
28 Dec 2020, 1:40 PM
moved by this. Good imagery.
Certainly agree with the sentiment!
Imaginative, humorous!
(some die, not dies)
Well done!
Captain--not captian...
Taking the first word from every stanza (an acrostic of sorts):
I will always feel complete while you're in my life.
Enjoyed this!
Jill Stockinger
on the absent-minded walk on the proverbial mountainside of nothingness + my mother's old tampons by skaskowski
28 Dec 2020, 2:42 PM
Loved the rhythm! You maintained it beautifully!
some good imagery
Love the last stanza!
like the idea and this has some very good lines.
Cute! Especially the image of the snake classroom at the end!
He WAS caged for treason.
Love the last 2 lines.
(gurney)
dove's wing needs an apostrophe
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I imagine this being about poems that write, usually after considerable wine, and read the next day before they have escaped to somewhere, and they are like cockroaches--slimy infectious creatures. I keep them though, tuck them away for they are part of me, and in the right light and the right revision might become. Become what? Nothing probably, but who knows.
Your love is something I do not want. Take him. Do what you want. But this sounds codependent and mutually destructive. Nevertheless, you've said it well.