poemranker ::the absent-minded walk on the proverbial mountainside of nothingness + my mother's old tampons by skaskowski

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Free verse № 233

the absent-minded walk on the proverbial mountainside of nothingness + my mother's old tampons

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 7 comments

intangible lies breed disposable flies the benchmark of salvaging truth with the gloss of a dream and the breath of a scream i see that my shadow's uncouth to cling is to share and to live unaware of life in the fullest extreme so i see in the dark of this abysmal spark the flame of my torturous theme with breath that is bated and so underrated the master has shackled his loins to the frame of a door in the house of a whore who lives at the edge of des moines arise from the fog you flea-ridden dog and clean up the mess you have made with a nice spongy mop and gingerbread chopped with the ax that our lies have unmade disposed of these flies with our crude alibis the truth has erased where we sat Our screams were forgotten in dreams that are rotten All wrought in the shadow's pet cat

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7 comments

[1] anonymous 7-Aug-01/7:34 AM Reply
if you are really saying something here, it's lost on me.
[n/a] ifni 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
meter and rhyme can redeem many subjects.
[3] deleted user 13-May-02/11:27 AM Reply
well.....you can rhyme.
[10] horus8 23-Jul-02/2:09 PM Reply
I'm sorry, <feel faint> but i've been left babbling and unapproachable by this fuckkkkking gem. this peridot(the only gem on record from outerspace) truly great work. cheers 10. 10. 10.g
[9] Bachus 29-May-03/9:44 AM Reply
Ah, yes, the truth is all in her children.
[6] blindwriter 20-Nov-04/3:33 AM Reply
i am disgraced by posting here.
i'm sure you didn't mean this as intelligence at all.
there is a classification of poetry that is so entirely abstract in its imagery that it is clever. However, that form of poeticism is carefully written. Yours is obviously a piece of mockery. But I like it.
[5] Jill Stockinger 28-Dec-20/2:42 PM Reply
Loved the rhythm! You maintained it beautifully!