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Nicotine Ruse (Free verse) by Red_is_life Ballet Dancing
ash tray amazing
ballancing ciggarette.
Chimney smoking
lung destroying
air burning.
Lead me to my death.
Up the ladder:
the absent-minded walk on the proverbial mountainside of nothingness + my mother's old tampons
Down the ladder:
cars
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Posted: July 16, 2002 1:32 AM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2002 1:32 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.865529 Overall Rank: 10312 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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16-Jul-02/1:45 AM
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The serial killer smoked left handed. Schooled by nuns. Abused. He was slow to ash his Lucky strike. Not yet old. Twenty-seven, but moving ever farther from seventeen.(keep up the good work. short and sweet)
I really wasnt sure about this one because my style has changed so much recently (read flies or black hole soul) and I wasnt sure what the new style comes across as. Thanx lol
i think the thirrd line shoud be swithched to say cigarette balancing, but its kool.
Another dead poet. This sucks dead poet.
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