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B.F.

by skaskowski

Member since 2001 · Posted 9 Oct 2003 · 6 comments

you were a fragile flower that i stooped to pick, and scooped you up in my moment of stupor. and do you know? you proved to be more than an answer. more like a mystery waiting to be pieced together. Yet that mystery still offered something more. My precious flower, you hold in your petals the dew of my tears. so i hold you tighter than ever you're lighter than a feather, and i fear that i'll crush you. Please place your petals where my heart beats freely. Be a lapel on my chest to stand as a stapled reminder. Of what i've tried to digress to, but never lived up to. Never was able to. I stooped to pick you and pricked my fingers on your thorns. how my skin bleeds still, how my wound is layed open fresh still. How i long to be unknowingly picked by you just as freely.

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6 comments

[7] Garrett S Sexton 9-Oct-03/1:58 PM Reply
sexy
[8] irishfolksuicide 9-Oct-03/2:09 PM Reply
Can't really hear it as a lyric,

nevertheless nice wordplay, and poetic language with something more concrete
[n/a] skaskowski › irishfolksuicide 9-Oct-03/9:21 PM Reply
once my band records the song, i'll let you hear it through an mp3. it works, i promise.
[7] Bachus 9-Oct-03/3:55 PM Reply
Lai
[5] Shuushin 9-Oct-03/6:08 PM Reply
These two lines are stunning, perhaps in a comedic way:

"Be a lapel on my chest
to stand as a stapled reminder [.]
[o]f what i've tried to digress to,
but never lived up to.
Never was able to."

btw - the use of "digress" here sounds like a thesaurus as work - "turn", "aspire"?
[6] Jill Stockinger 28-Dec-20/2:56 PM Reply
Love the last stanza!