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B.F. (Lyric) by skaskowski
you were a fragile flower that i stooped to pick, and scooped you up in my moment of stupor. and do you know? you proved to be more than an answer. more like a mystery waiting to be pieced together. Yet that mystery still offered something more. My precious flower, you hold in your petals the dew of my tears. so i hold you tighter than ever you're lighter than a feather, and i fear that i'll crush you. Please place your petals where my heart beats freely. Be a lapel on my chest to stand as a stapled reminder. Of what i've tried to digress to, but never lived up to. Never was able to. I stooped to pick you and pricked my fingers on your thorns. how my skin bleeds still, how my wound is layed open fresh still. How i long to be unknowingly picked by you just as freely.

Down the ladder: Dancing against the rain

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2727275
Weighted score: 5.1363635
Overall Rank: 5515
Posted: October 9, 2003 1:55 PM PDT; Last modified: October 9, 2003 1:55 PM PDT
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Comments:
[7] Garrett S Sexton @ 81.135.60.102 | 9-Oct-03/1:58 PM | Reply
sexy
[8] irishfolksuicide @ 81.178.210.163 | 9-Oct-03/2:09 PM | Reply
Can't really hear it as a lyric,

nevertheless nice wordplay, and poetic language with something more concrete
[n/a] skaskowski @ 216.125.247.11 > irishfolksuicide | 9-Oct-03/9:21 PM | Reply
once my band records the song, i'll let you hear it through an mp3. it works, i promise.
[7] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 9-Oct-03/3:55 PM | Reply
Lai
[5] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 9-Oct-03/6:08 PM | Reply
These two lines are stunning, perhaps in a comedic way:

"Be a lapel on my chest
to stand as a stapled reminder [.]
[o]f what i've tried to digress to,
but never lived up to.
Never was able to."

btw - the use of "digress" here sounds like a thesaurus as work - "turn", "aspire"?
[6] Jill Stockinger @ 127.0.0.1 | 28-Dec-20/2:56 PM | Reply
Love the last stanza!
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