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Free verse № 5103

Dancing against the rain

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Jul 2002 · 1 comment

Glimpsed, one day, through rain-flecked glass and grey Past metal boxes sliding lonely onward- Alone. Still. Untroubled by the noise, The wait, the endless grinding wet a figure like first lust lost (dawn's new shame) the pain that will not go away I caught myself, but then the bus lurched left she turned and I thought I saw her eyes. They were pale blue, and sparkling, as they danced against the rain.

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[9] heroditus 28-Aug-02/3:52 PM Reply
great stuff-9/10