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exploration of entirety (Free verse) by skaskowski tree shadows paint portraits,
dancing dillemas on silhouetted surfaces.
finite whisps and winters
flake like cinder from december.
animated vines and veins
pulse purple in a perfect pitch.
seismic shifts, sandy sickness.
summer stapled, serpent disabled.
a frigid foray
into the dim dismal downpour.
Up the ladder:
Upon meeting Mrs Gunn at the Butchers
Down the ladder:
Interstellar Hell
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Posted: October 31, 2003 12:12 AM PST; Last modified: October 31, 2003 12:12 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.345782 Overall Rank: 3431 Comments:
You write like Richa, except in this case you make more sense.
An umbrella is needed for that type of ganglia exposure.
some good imagery
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Stapled/disabled rhyme sounds a bit odd.
I like the second verse, and the third verse (although v3 took a few rereads).
Yep overall pretty good, lively.