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Steal my heart (Free verse) by baby_d It was love a first sight.
And try as I might,
I could'nt find a way to get you off my mind.
You've stolen my heart, and given me a new start.
I just want you to know that as far as our love grows
please treat my heart with care.
Be fair, don't break my heart by wanting to be apart.
Because I'm in love with You and I feel everything You do.
You've stolen my heart so please be smart.
Up the ladder:
Beating heart
Down the ladder:
Caducus (destined to fall)
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.285714
Posted: November 9, 2003 12:28 PM PST; Last modified: November 9, 2003 12:28 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.345782 Overall Rank: 3417 Comments:
It does sound kinda pimple. Try to expand your mind when writing about love, it's too easy to sound cliche(At least that's what they say)
Is this luv or begging just dont know, most of all this feels wrong,but bub ill say its worth a 4 & no more:o(
nice theme, could use development in my oppinion.
Really cute need to work on ending verse
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