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exploration of entirety (Free verse) by skaskowski

tree shadows paint portraits, dancing dillemas on silhouetted surfaces. finite whisps and winters flake like cinder from december. animated vines and veins pulse purple in a perfect pitch. seismic shifts, sandy sickness. summer stapled, serpent disabled. a frigid foray into the dim dismal downpour.

richa 31-Oct-03/6:32 AM
I think the alliteration loses its power as it is overdone.

Stapled/disabled rhyme sounds a bit odd.

I like the second verse, and the third verse (although v3 took a few rereads).

Yep overall pretty good, lively.




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