Re: I dreamt a white Black widow by INTRANSIT	20-Jul-04/9:44 AM
where da white womens be at??? excellent cockrings and machineguns...staccato whispers.
Re: A Girl’s Climax by Dovina	12-Jul-04/5:00 AM
I cannot imagine what one could find ambiguous about this poem.
Re: Closed Doors by the indign	11-Jul-04/6:15 AM
my god, child. have you read this aloud? anew again? sour knife?
Re: for June (the boy not the month)/Beatrice Poon by New Life Drug	11-Jul-04/6:10 AM
cut off the first half
Re: Ze invsible limerick by DR Limerick	11-Jul-04/6:08 AM
crickets chirping
Re: Funny Little World by LintyWeenis	11-Jul-04/6:07 AM
well. this poem...not so good. but your screen name is the best i have seen...perfect, diamond brilliance. 10
Re: The circle of life by sanity	11-Jul-04/6:03 AM
i laughed. I cried...mostly cried. then i began to vomit
Re: Urbane Jane by MacFrantic	7-Jul-04/6:24 AM
i still do not understand why sung and not sang.
Re: Bankruptcy by INTRANSIT	7-Jul-04/6:17 AM
i am not entirely sure, but i don't think that the word "loom" can be used as a transitive verb. perhaps move the word loom to the first line or use a comma. this goes well with part 2, and is pretty good, and even a bit funny.
Re: Bankruptcy (2) by INTRANSIT	7-Jul-04/6:14 AM
lions could use an apostrophe
Re: Whore by gavinduff	7-Jul-04/6:01 AM
let me be the first to say "davinguff" sentence structure is a major, crucial element in all writing, including free verse, prose and even some grocery lists. the worthwhile writer takes his potential audience into consideration, and tries to structure sentences in a way that makes them understandable to that audience. I think the poem is pretty good, though it feels like a preach in parts. this is unsavory.
Re: escape by moonlightdance	6-Jul-04/7:04 AM
problems that dwell in our world???
Re: Urbane Jane by MacFrantic	6-Jul-04/7:02 AM
i do think "faltered ego" could be better stated. more clear.
Re: Urbane Jane by MacFrantic	6-Jul-04/7:00 AM
"her foot servants too" what is with all the low votes here? i think confined to an air of vanity is quite a good line. and we sang to her i think this poem is excellent
Re: a comment on Forbidden by Chasz Misleading	6-Jul-04/6:57 AM
TRYING to succeed is just too typical...is what i think he is trying to say....but that is not any more accurate. second verse is great.
Re: Blobby blob code ** by MR Blobby	6-Jul-04/6:53 AM
i would give you a 10, but since you already have a 3....i think shooting for the worst list is a better option. blob on.
Re: Virgin Bride by TwilightDawned	6-Jul-04/6:50 AM
Bob Sagat blowing Jung
Re: The lost perfume of my yellow-rose-Girl by Prince of Void	6-Jul-04/6:47 AM
an attenuated strip of cheese graffiti on the side of an ass dumpster
Re: Your sad goodbye by sanity	5-Jul-04/8:29 AM
there is something catchy and appealing about this.
Re: Mother nature's creation (Terza Rima sonnet) by sanity	5-Jul-04/8:27 AM
for you and I?????