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Forbidden (Free verse) by Chasz Misleading I tried to be like you
But I'm not allowed
I try to act disinterested
But no one comes to see
I try to hate
But no one cares either
I try to succeed
But then it's just too typical
I try to end
But you stop me
Up the ladder:
Simply beautiful
Down the ladder:
The Man with the Fiberglass Head
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Posted: July 5, 2004 3:19 PM PDT; Last modified: July 5, 2004 3:19 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.0 Overall Rank: 1302 Comments:
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Dovina @ 24.52.157.176
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5-Jul-04/3:24 PM
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Good, especially verse 2.
If you think success is typical, you should take a look at the last 13,235 poems posted on poemranker.
TRYING to succeed is just too typical...is what i think he is trying to say....but that is not any more accurate. second verse is great.
with you on the second verse.
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