Re: A Spring bird in November (Edit) by Sasha	10-Nov-04/9:01 AM
i have to agree with Jimmy Z on this one, though I doubt i would have noticed myself, otherwise. What you have is really good.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Nov-04/3:24 PM
Don’t smoke, don’t drink, Don’t lie, and don’t think, I couldn’t tell, Last night, by the smell, Of your voice. this stanza isreally good. way too many commas, though. Don’t smoke, don’t drink, Don’t lie and don’t think I couldn’t tell, Last night, by the smell Of your voice. This would make more sense to me, the way i read it. the rest, well... "I am surprised and stunned by your care, Thanks so much for teaching me not to swear." I cannot believe you wrote this and said...yah..that's good. sounds right. awful. It would at least have been kinda funny if you had said, "not to fucking swear" the repeating stanza redeems this somewhat. There may be hope for you yet.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Nov-04/3:51 PM
quick, take the ice out of the refrigerator! It is leaking all over the weenies!
Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus	10-Nov-04/7:46 PM
smut
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Nov-04/7:53 PM
what a coincidence! she is my soul too!
Re: Ash by horus8	12-Nov-04/8:25 AM
hey. WHen is your ban from AP up? that place is starting to scare me... DP roberson has been banned too. Bulletin threads are being censored left and right.
Re: Feminist? by RGSsparky	16-Nov-04/2:02 PM
FUcking hilarious
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Nov-04/4:43 PM
a literary triumph
Re: Disable by blacksoul	22-Dec-04/1:51 PM
my mom only has one
Re: Boiled by INTRANSIT	22-Feb-05/7:04 AM
the whole metaphor is a bit silly, and that is good. and that rhyme at the end is funny, heart to choke never to bloom artichoke. I like artichoke hearts in a nice oily pasta salad, virgin and salami, some garden fresh cherry tomatoes and buffalo mozzarella, fresh of course.
Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	22-Feb-05/7:07 AM
what?????
Re: Hunter Thompson, In The Off Beat Chance Of Cunnilingus by horus8	22-Feb-05/7:17 AM
not too carefully, I hope, or that 300 dismissal lingers, smoking a camel, right around the corner! I wonder about the words "venerated" and "fiasco", and whether you might not find something that crystalizes what you mean there a bit better. This was an absolute delight to read. It purred down the screen, finely oiled, smelling vaguely of Big Mac droppings and fat cubans. Your hair was dark and short. Nice touch. Just excellent writing and a 10 When are you due back to AP? Are you even coming back? I hope so. Things have grown a bit dull in your absence, and in the void you left, I am being attacked by all the illiterate teeny boppers, "U R an Ass. Do you get off mAkIng fun of kids with ADD?" etc etc etc...Also, I have some problems with the sound on my PC, so can't listen to the music you send me. Shame that. Trying to remedy
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Feb-05/7:19 AM
Fucking hilarious. Hits so close to home. 10
Re: Hunger by Dovina	22-Feb-05/7:31 AM
ugh
Re: The Plane of War by MacFrantic	22-Feb-05/8:06 AM
and the wormy piles of colons strewn across the land glistened like thin wet rats and nobody listened. the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did, and spilled my drippings on the bloody red madness of the day in a skirt
Re: Pennies by woodstock20000	22-Feb-05/6:47 PM
Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines? I kind of like it, against my will.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Feb-05/7:05 PM
this stillis one of the best poems i have ever read.
Re: The Mushrooms' Song by zodiac	22-Feb-05/7:55 PM
Revisiting this, I have to say I think it is brilliant. That last stanza is quite surprising and reveals a lot..,the way the cat is sucked in, in a comparatively short instant...the mushrooms growing at a completetly negligible pace. And it feels so dank. Anyway, I love it.
Re: Jack and Jill by Dovina	22-Feb-05/8:04 PM
Quickly! Spit spot!
Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	23-Feb-05/7:46 AM
what sin!