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Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid (Other) by PodPoet
Getting pumped up to get laid Building muscle to pave the way Pounds shed, muscles flaunted Wanting so desperately to be wanted You hate the thought of a shirt Worked too hard to cover up your work Those hard shapes define a lifestyle Muscles cover weakness...for a while But can a sexy new bod fill the hole Or will something else make life meaningful You're a poster boy of the physically fine Until, one day, you see the first sign And to gym workouts you add another regimen: Popping pills, as lesions threaten the skin What went wrong, you ask What mistake What sin

Up the ladder: Blood and roses.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7056
Posted: February 21, 2005 10:26 PM PST; Last modified: March 11, 2005 11:08 PM PST
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[5] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 | 22-Feb-05/7:07 AM | Reply
what?????
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.4.46 | 22-Feb-05/2:42 PM | Reply
"layed" in the first line. And I think what we go through for a hunk is more than a hunk goes through to get layed.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 > Dovina | 22-Feb-05/3:08 PM | Reply
Yes, coming from a woman that splotches out scroll after scroll of bad ovarian poetry, we only can dare to concur.
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.8.220 > Shardik | 22-Feb-05/3:21 PM | Reply
And dare to delete and retaliate?
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 > Dovina | 22-Feb-05/3:33 PM | Reply
Plus, what can I say that Zodiac already hasn't?
Your mediocrity is revolting at best.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 > Dovina | 22-Feb-05/3:37 PM | Reply
Yes, I dare, now what?
Are you going to try and
say something witty about
your incessant droning
whine for cock and attention,
or just sit there on your fat
fucking ass for another year
or two squelching bad love
poetry about ghetto folk
and blue collar tv sitcom
criteria no one is remotely
interested in, besides you,
and maybe Chrystal lane swift
when she doesn't have a cock in her eye...
Fucking cream puff hacks
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 > Dovina | 22-Feb-05/3:39 PM | Reply
What now you tub of fucking melting sherbert?
Come on, hit me with your hardest marshmallow.
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.8.220 > Shardik | 22-Feb-05/3:52 PM | Reply
I think you need a hug.
[n/a] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 > Dovina | 28-Feb-05/8:33 AM | Reply
And you need to be made airtight by three men of different socio-economic backgrounds.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 82.39.21.223 > Stephen Robins | 3-Mar-05/2:16 PM | Reply
lol
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 > Shardik | 23-Feb-05/3:12 AM | Reply
There's a bus that drives around here with "A Horus Production" written on the driversside door and a big Arab smoking handrolled cigarettes driving. As soon as I see it again, I'll get you a picture.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 > zodiac | 23-Feb-05/10:38 AM | Reply
No fucking way, really?
Dude: album art, postcards
wink from the devil.
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 | 22-Feb-05/3:09 PM | Reply
AIDS
[n/a] PodPoet @ 68.6.188.203 | 22-Feb-05/3:29 PM | Reply
Thanks for the comments so far. Actually, "get laid" & "get layed" are both correct: http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=get%20laid
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 > PodPoet | 22-Feb-05/3:31 PM | Reply
Of course they're both correct Dovina is retarded.
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.8.220 > PodPoet | 22-Feb-05/3:49 PM | Reply
They're both correct, but "layed" is less ambiguous.
[5] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 > Dovina | 22-Feb-05/6:39 PM | Reply
Layed is awful. I have never even seen "layed" before, not that that makes it awful, hehehehehheehehehehe, hit him with your hardest marshmallow, still laughing at that one.
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 > Dovina | 23-Feb-05/3:09 AM | Reply
And more respectable too. And you can pronounce it with two syllables.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.138 > zodiac | 23-Feb-05/6:45 AM | Reply
What about lay'd and lade?
[5] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 > INTRANSIT | 23-Feb-05/7:46 AM | Reply
what about fucked or bedded?
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 > INTRANSIT | 23-Feb-05/10:39 AM | Reply
Hows abouts ladeled?
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.11.12 > Dovina | 28-Feb-05/9:31 PM | Reply
There's no such word as "layed". You fucking retard bint.
[5] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 | 23-Feb-05/7:46 AM | Reply
what sin!
[8] Dreammaker1024 @ 67.149.74.86 | 12-Mar-05/1:47 PM | Reply
I like it... believe the end could use somethin else, add a lil somethin, but I still think you did a good job.
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