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Pennies (Free verse) by woodstock20000
I wonder when I stopped picking up pennies. When their value suddenly wasn't worth it anymore. I grieve for that day. The day when pennies lost their magic. When it became a mere hundredth of a dollar, instead of a miracle of God. I used to always think, "I wonder how it got here." Traveling, through the years, the pockets, the floors of life. Till it came to this spot, and found me. And I would pick it up. And put it in my pocket. And take it to its next destination. Thinking how lucky I was. To have such a treasure.

Up the ladder: Pele's pulse
Down the ladder: Untitled

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.3333335
Overall Rank: 3492
Posted: February 22, 2005 8:52 AM PST; Last modified: February 22, 2005 8:52 AM PST
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[6] nentwined @ 64.60.192.130 | 22-Feb-05/9:31 AM | Reply
I like the thought; think perhaps the poem would work better if you just started it at "I used to always think", maybe ending one with one last line summarizing the cut lines--"I grieve for those lost days"
[7] Dovina @ 12.72.4.46 | 22-Feb-05/2:47 PM | Reply
Scratch the last line. The first 5 lines seem bulky, wordy.
[6] Shardik @ 24.130.62.63 | 22-Feb-05/3:22 PM | Reply
All pennies come from Uranus
[6] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 | 22-Feb-05/6:47 PM | Reply
Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines?

I kind of like it, against my will.
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 | 23-Feb-05/3:13 AM | Reply
You sure do a lot of grieving for those days. It's kind of sad. -10-
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