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Free verse № 120549

Pennies

Member since 2005 · Posted 22 Feb 2005 · 5 comments

I wonder when I stopped picking up pennies. When their value suddenly wasn't worth it anymore. I grieve for that day. The day when pennies lost their magic. When it became a mere hundredth of a dollar, instead of a miracle of God. I used to always think, "I wonder how it got here." Traveling, through the years, the pockets, the floors of life. Till it came to this spot, and found me. And I would pick it up. And put it in my pocket. And take it to its next destination. Thinking how lucky I was. To have such a treasure.

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[6] nentwined 22-Feb-05/9:31 AM Reply
I like the thought; think perhaps the poem would work better if you just started it at "I used to always think", maybe ending one with one last line summarizing the cut lines--"I grieve for those lost days"
[7] Dovina 22-Feb-05/2:47 PM Reply
Scratch the last line. The first 5 lines seem bulky, wordy.
[6] Shardik 22-Feb-05/3:22 PM Reply
All pennies come from Uranus
[6] edpeterson 22-Feb-05/6:47 PM Reply
Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines?

I kind of like it, against my will.
[10] zodiac 23-Feb-05/3:13 AM Reply
You sure do a lot of grieving for those days. It's kind of sad. -10-