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Free verse № 120470

The Plane of War

Member since 2003 · Posted 20 Feb 2005 · 4 comments

Two tides of men stood still As they collectively exhaled; The stale air trembled Suddenly iron sprang and clashed iron Sound roared from them Shaking the sky; Cracking the earth away to fire The pulsing fever of death Upon death shrouded the sun While the mangled shields Giving way and giving ground Fought nothing except themselves All of time had come to this This single point of disaster When all of man stood still; When none could breathe

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[7] Dovina 21-Feb-05/7:52 AM Reply
War is bad. We know that, and unless a poem presents something unusual about it, the thing falls flat.
[10] zodiac 22-Feb-05/6:32 AM Reply
Before reading this poem, I didn't know war was bad.
[n/a] edpeterson 22-Feb-05/8:06 AM Reply
and the wormy piles of colons strewn across the land
glistened
like thin wet rats
and nobody listened.

the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did,
and spilled my drippings
on the bloody red madness of the day

in a skirt
[7] Dovina › edpeterson 22-Feb-05/2:49 PM Reply
not bad