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The Plane of War (Free verse) by MacFrantic
Two tides of men stood still As they collectively exhaled; The stale air trembled Suddenly iron sprang and clashed iron Sound roared from them Shaking the sky; Cracking the earth away to fire The pulsing fever of death Upon death shrouded the sun While the mangled shields Giving way and giving ground Fought nothing except themselves All of time had come to this This single point of disaster When all of man stood still; When none could breathe

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.9403987
Overall Rank: 9074
Posted: February 20, 2005 11:34 PM PST; Last modified: February 20, 2005 11:34 PM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 12.72.4.56 | 21-Feb-05/7:52 AM | Reply
War is bad. We know that, and unless a poem presents something unusual about it, the thing falls flat.
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 | 22-Feb-05/6:32 AM | Reply
Before reading this poem, I didn't know war was bad.
[n/a] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 | 22-Feb-05/8:06 AM | Reply
and the wormy piles of colons strewn across the land
glistened
like thin wet rats
and nobody listened.

the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did,
and spilled my drippings
on the bloody red madness of the day

in a skirt
[7] Dovina @ 12.72.4.46 > edpeterson | 22-Feb-05/2:49 PM | Reply
not bad
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