Re: a comment on Dear Willy, from Romeo (Edit) by Sasha	12-May-04/5:03 PM
also, I would use Bill instead of Willie..but that's just me.
Re: a comment on Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17	12-May-04/4:16 PM
You make a valid point, but you have to start somewhere. The problem with most people is that they only work on one thing instead of trying to get better as a whole.
Re: a comment on Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17	12-May-04/3:52 PM
An expanded vocabulary would not help with making -=Dark_Angel=- like your poetry but it would improve it. I'm not saying that you have to memorize the dictionary. Simply read more poetry to dicover new words and how to use them correctly.
Re: Dear Willy, from Romeo (Edit) by Sasha	12-May-04/3:39 PM
Not bad, but I don't know if you should call this a lyric.
Re: a comment on Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17	12-May-04/3:37 PM
See below for an example.
Re: Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17	12-May-04/3:34 PM
This is better than the last one of yours that I read. I think you just need to expand your vocabulary a little bit and you'll be okay.
Re: a comment on Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17	12-May-04/12:06 PM
Eloquently worded shit is still shit.
Re: ...So We Stayed In The Water by Fear of Garbage	11-May-04/1:09 PM
Hmmmm, I don't much care for spiders....kind of freaks me out...
Re: a comment on eva by samgon	10-May-04/7:57 PM
genius. you should market that.
Re: After the ice season ~ shamelessly lewd revision by zodiac	10-May-04/7:52 PM
I'm not really seeing anything "shamelessly lewd" here, but it's pretty good.
Re: Its raining by caitydee	10-May-04/7:39 PM
Not enough cursing to really be a pimple....
Re: a comment on Its raining by caitydee	10-May-04/7:38 PM
What are we firing up? I got some shit the other day that....oh....wait....nevermind...what?
Re: a comment on Obituary for the Moon by wilco	10-May-04/7:37 PM
Oh, somehow....it works to perfection. I just like saying sloppy slaw.
Re: selfhood, through extrospection by nentwined	10-May-04/7:28 PM
-8- Because introspection is so very overrated.
Re: a comment on Obituary for the Moon by wilco	10-May-04/7:10 PM
You know what? Sometimes I think that this weighted scoring system is some sloppy slaw. How do I get six 9s, an 8 and a 10 and I still only have a 6.08? Sloppy slaw indeed.
Re: Insomnia by wilco	10-May-04/7:07 PM
I wrote this my freshman year of college and ran across it tonight. Since I'm 1/2 drunk and don't much feel like writing, I decided to post it. Please have mercy, as it is what it is. ;o)
Re: Don't Let Your Ass Get Hit By the Door by Spindle	10-May-04/6:27 PM
Not bad, but for a country & Western song this should really be: I don't want you 'round here no more
Re: a comment on Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17	10-May-04/1:34 PM
When you ARE a teen it is often hard to think of anything else. Sasha is right, though. You should prepare yourself for the "impolite" criticism regarding poetry of this nature.
Re: Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT	10-May-04/12:49 PM
This is a good one, for shizzle.
Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco	10-May-04/12:46 PM
I wonder why hypatia changed her name to "Deleted User".....I liked the old name better....