on Sunrise by Katrina
17 May 2004, 1:37 PM
Well, for starters, I would work on your spelling (although I think many of the ones here are simply typos).
on 'Till Then by sliver
17 May 2004, 1:32 PM
That's quite a sad little song...played mostly in minor chords I'd bet..
on and the world evolves by peaceseeker
17 May 2004, 1:26 PM
I'd give the poem an 8, but since I just read that you're a social worker I'm going to give you a 10. This is because, as a social worker, I know how bad it is.
on Slayer Sucks by peaceseeker
17 May 2004, 1:24 PM
A 10 simply for the title (and the poem's not bad either. Slayer does suck.
on Gravity Rides by Jealousy
15 May 2004, 10:12 AM
Here's the man with teeth
like God's shoeshine,
He sparkles, shimmers, shines.
This needs to have quotes around it.
like God's shoeshine,
He sparkles, shimmers, shines.
This needs to have quotes around it.
replying on FINGER PIE by titan69
13 May 2004, 3:00 PM
Don't know pie tom....
replying on Bleeding in the American South by wilco
13 May 2004, 2:50 PM
It's not going to make me feel badly about it either way. I was just trying to get the constructive criticism out of the fact that you wanted to cut your throat, so thanks.
replying on Waste Replacing by Phalkon
13 May 2004, 2:35 PM
seriously.
replying on FINGER PIE by titan69
13 May 2004, 2:35 PM
the fucking "American Pie" guy.
replying on Bleeding in the American South by wilco
13 May 2004, 2:32 PM
So it is...but does it suck? Depressing and shitty are two different things. I'm just curious if the one is because it is horribly depressing or horribly bad (or both). Anyway, thanks for playing. :0)
replying on Bleeding in the American South by wilco
13 May 2004, 2:15 PM
Why the fuck would you do that?
on FINGER PIE by titan69
13 May 2004, 2:13 PM
Jason Biggs?
on Prophets by unknown^user
13 May 2004, 2:11 PM
What's the world coming to when even God can't look at internet porn?
replying on Waste Replacing by Phalkon
13 May 2004, 2:09 PM
wtf...
on She Dreams of Yesterday by Phalkon
13 May 2004, 2:07 PM
Not too bad, but you may want to consider changing this to a lyric and adding a chorus or something. Just a thought...
on an ode to hypatia by francis nor capule
13 May 2004, 2:02 PM
Good thoughts.
replying on The Blood-Stained Body by Phalkon
13 May 2004, 2:00 PM
The "liberal defenders of homosexual marriage and "gay" rights" would simply claim that there is a vast conspiracy perpetrated by the conservatives to make homosexuals out to be criminals in order to convince the public that they should all be burned at the stake.
replying on Bleeding in the American South by wilco
13 May 2004, 5:42 AM
Correct.
replying on Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17
12 May 2004, 6:15 PM
Oh..I wasn't aware..gracias, then.
replying on Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17
12 May 2004, 6:00 PM
You're very welcome and if you read any of mine (and, of course, I would encourage you to do so), please don't take them as examples of genuinely good poetry.