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Sunrise (Free verse) by Katrina
As I slowly being to wake you are still asleep. I still feel you lightly breathing on the back of my neck, and you are still holding me so close and tight to you. I softly whisper,"sweetie I believe it is time to wake up." Then you gingerly roll to the other side. And now the sunrise is coming right into the window, and hitting you perfectly on your face. Every color the sunrise makes is perfectly aranged in the rays and coming through on the beams. Your just lying there so peaceful and I knew I had to get up and start the day, but I could not move. At that moment in time, I started thinking of every reason of why I feel in love with you, and I just added that moment ontop of the other hundreds. Then I just kissed your lips, whispered in your ear that I loved you, than said you can sleep in another 20 min. Than you have to get up.

Up the ladder: LIFELINE

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.134471
Overall Rank: 5578
Posted: May 16, 2004 11:41 PM PDT; Last modified: May 16, 2004 11:41 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] Bobjim @ 212.135.1.57 | 17-May-04/4:56 AM | Reply
And 10 again.
[2] titan69 @ 62.31.23.123 | 17-May-04/1:28 PM | Reply
And go home to your wife!!
[6] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 | 17-May-04/1:37 PM | Reply
Well, for starters, I would work on your spelling (although I think many of the ones here are simply typos).
[9] caitydee @ 64.12.116.70 | 17-May-04/9:21 PM | Reply
Some parts of this were cliche, but its so true, isn't it funny how life works like that, and I know I could have written the same thing, so I can't fault you for that! Regardless, I love this, good job.
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