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Without you (Free verse) by Luv2write
I remember when I told you the first time
And you turned your head and smiled
And with the cruel smile my heart was broken
I had loved you
I continued
And then, someone new
Who I blindly thought could replace you
Seconds passed and now
Wishing for your arms
Your ocean eyes of soothing bluegreen
That was all I ever wanted
All I never had
All I could never own.
And your smile, the light in my pit
Of dark lonliness
Appearing at the end of a tunnel of
Dispair.
They warned me
"Stay away from the light"
They said
"It's dangerous! Don't go near it!"
But I turned away from them, focused only on
The light.
Then your smile faded, the light was hidden from me
I was lost. I had no direction, no purpose
I abandoned my mission of reaching the light
Turned by back and ran away
Then the light reappeared, and I crawled back
Now, so close. But I can't move closer
You won't let me
And all I long to do is reach out and touch you
Kiss you
Tell you that I cannot live without you
The light burns brigther, but no longer in my path.
For the light has moved on
And now I am alone
With nothing.
I am alone
Without you.
I am alone.
I am alone.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.134471
Overall Rank: 5586
Posted: December 11, 2003 7:40 PM PST; Last modified: December 11, 2003 7:43 PM PST
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I actually thought maybe it was satire toward the middle there, started hoping for a twist ending.
Must be getting jaded in my old age.