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and the world evolves (Free verse) by peaceseeker let's not, and then say we did
clink
here's to your next lover
oblivious to your intentions
basking in the glow
of your light
reflecting back
what you request
tolerating each
slippery step down
into the ground
of your din
with your inability to air
your pain in reality
may you always be happy
with a light behind your smile.
may you forever follow
the passion from your heart.
may you lift yourself
from the downward spiral
your deepest pain brings you to.
may you be grateful
you were so fortunate
to live and love
inside my universe
Up the ladder:
post-rock messiah
Down the ladder:
A Rally
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Posted: May 16, 2004 10:01 AM PDT; Last modified: May 16, 2004 10:26 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.4482355 Overall Rank: 2966 Comments:
Not so much to grab onto, a lot of abstracts. Like how it begins.
I'd give the poem an 8, but since I just read that you're a social worker I'm going to give you a 10. This is because, as a social worker, I know how bad it is.
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The whole thing seems a quasi-religious litany to some weird semi-deified entity known as "you." However "you" is most certainly not human because "you" is unable to air "your"m pain in reality. Then again "you" is also not omnipotent because "you" is not the one in whose universe the "living and loving" is done.
Please explain who this mysterious "you" is.
Thank you
"You are what you make of me".....who'd you learn that from?
Ani D.- "We'll see what you are made of by what you make of me."
You will never be as gay as me -- I have Jesu.
Hi Dalia, welcome to poemranker.
It get's bloody around here.
I hope you've brought a slicker.
maybe i'm more bloody than poemranker.
bloodier?