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and the world evolves (Free verse) by peaceseeker

let's not, and then say we did clink here's to your next lover oblivious to your intentions basking in the glow of your light reflecting back what you request tolerating each slippery step down into the ground of your din with your inability to air your pain in reality may you always be happy with a light behind your smile. may you forever follow the passion from your heart. may you lift yourself from the downward spiral your deepest pain brings you to. may you be grateful you were so fortunate to live and love inside my universe

Sasha 16-May-04/11:59 AM
"live and love inside my universe" sounds like an anglophone Catullus on a bad day.

The whole thing seems a quasi-religious litany to some weird semi-deified entity known as "you." However "you" is most certainly not human because "you" is unable to air "your"m pain in reality. Then again "you" is also not omnipotent because "you" is not the one in whose universe the "living and loving" is done.

Please explain who this mysterious "you" is.

Thank you




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