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She Dreams of Yesterday (Free verse) by Phalkon another day goes by
she only lays in bed
the days go on without her
she feels so sad
she's so lonely now
and she dreams of yesterday
in her empty house
in her empty room
where light can never enter
she wears her clothes of grey
because they match her hair
and she dreams of yesterday
she's never had true love
she's never had a life
she's never had a family
she never had money
but she never had greed
and she dreams of yesterday
she dreams of better things
she hopes for sun some day
every day is dark and gloomy
she cries herself to sleep
in her empty bed
and she dreams of yesterday
she lives another day
of her empty life
no one's there for mercy
she believes in God
and an afterlife
but she dreams of yesterday
but she dreams of yesterday...
Up the ladder:
Descendent
Down the ladder:
Who I am
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Posted: May 13, 2004 6:33 AM PDT; Last modified: May 13, 2004 6:33 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7613 Comments:
Not too bad, but you may want to consider changing this to a lyric and adding a chorus or something. Just a thought...
i actually was thinking about making this into a sort of non-rhyming song like Sting's "fields of gold".... but i have yet to come up with a tune for it :\
makes perfect sence to me.8/10
She's probably better off than most.
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"she's never had true love
she's never had a life
she's never had a family
she never had money
but she never had greed
and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.
"every day is dark and gloomy...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.
"she believes in God
and an afterlife
but she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.
*ponders* .. maybe I'll get a satisfactory reply if i include bow'ls in this reply?
...Bow'ls...