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She Dreams of Yesterday (Free verse) by Phalkon

another day goes by she only lays in bed the days go on without her she feels so sad she's so lonely now and she dreams of yesterday in her empty house in her empty room where light can never enter she wears her clothes of grey because they match her hair and she dreams of yesterday she's never had true love she's never had a life she's never had a family she never had money but she never had greed and she dreams of yesterday she dreams of better things she hopes for sun some day every day is dark and gloomy she cries herself to sleep in her empty bed and she dreams of yesterday she lives another day of her empty life no one's there for mercy she believes in God and an afterlife but she dreams of yesterday but she dreams of yesterday...

zodiac 13-May-04/11:07 AM
"the days go on without her...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.

"she's never had true love
she's never had a life
she's never had a family
she never had money
but she never had greed
and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.

"every day is dark and gloomy...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.

"she believes in God
and an afterlife
but she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.




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