| Re: Don't Say You Understand by cuddlytiger17 |
21-May-04/5:55 PM |
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This is MUCH better. Is this a new one that you wrote?
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| Re: a comment on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins |
21-May-04/4:54 PM |
Well, you are partly right. I am poor, young and I do HAVE a scrotum which houses a pair of very large balls.
So, let me make this clear to you:
YOU are a bargain basement -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. You think you are being clever with your comments but you lack the wit and intellect to make them anything but annoying.
It makes no difference, though, because your inability to understand the question better proves my point than anything that I could say.
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| Re: Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins |
21-May-04/1:42 PM |
Does it ever get old being a bargain-basement
-=Dark_Angel=-?
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| Re: Balance by Signature |
21-May-04/1:25 PM |
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No vote - because you voted on your own poem.
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| Re: Let Me Swing by caitydee |
21-May-04/1:23 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Catharsis by wilco |
20-May-04/8:13 PM |
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| Re: done than said by francis nor capule |
20-May-04/1:18 PM |
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just a word of advice...stop naming your poems "untitled". Surely you can come up with a name for them. That title just makes the whole thing boring even if it isn't.
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| Re: Hmm... by tre |
20-May-04/1:10 PM |
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Nope, but I guess there's some meaning to it.
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| Re: a comment on Unwed by gilded in gold |
19-May-04/8:54 PM |
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then you could rhyme it with Philadelphonic.
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| Re: a comment on Unwed by gilded in gold |
19-May-04/8:41 PM |
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ungarnished? I don't know. I think unpainted is fine.
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| Re: Unwed by gilded in gold |
19-May-04/8:33 PM |
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unpainted moments, eh.....ok...I'll bite -9-
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| Re: Just Like Before by cuddlytiger17 |
19-May-04/3:25 PM |
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You're getting better. Just try not to force the rhymes so much.
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/1:51 PM |
Ok, I see what your saying. I guess I'm one of those "Hey Guys" guys.
But, you know, if writers used reality it would be more like:
Sarah cooked dinner and got pissed
because I said it was 'pretty' good.
She wouldn't give me a blowjob
for a week and that really sucked.
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/1:42 PM |
Ok, then. thanks. Even if you were comparing it to "Meet Virginia", though, I guess there are worse you could'vr compared it to....like Creed....
and
She does not exist. I made her up. fic-sho-nul.
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/1:36 PM |
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So are you saying that this sounds like 'Meet Virginia' or are you just talking about that particular song because they are both about women?
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| Re: a comment on Lover by daveslady |
19-May-04/1:03 PM |
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Maybe this is a guy...named Dave Slady.
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
18-May-04/6:58 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
18-May-04/6:55 PM |
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It flows better with music. I know it's hard to get the right flow with a lyric, though when you don't have the music with it.
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| Re: ONCE by jroday |
18-May-04/12:26 PM |
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This is better than the last one of yours that I read, but still, consider taking the advice in those comments.
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| Re: I MISS YOU by jroday |
18-May-04/12:24 PM |
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First, I think that you definitely need to get some more experience before you write something like this. It's a good sentiment but you're ruining it with your lack of style and understanding of how to write. Take the advice of SupremeDreamer.
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