Re: a comment on Drug Addict by SupremeDreamer	20-Oct-03/2:37 PM
Pardon the malfunction in Line 12. It should read it’s (used properly) “it’s”. With Mr. Angel’s time saving device, I would have been spared such indignities.
Re: Drug Addict by SupremeDreamer	20-Oct-03/2:05 PM
Let’s see: Line 1: cliché Line: 2: cliché Line 3: cliché Line 4: what are you 14? Line 5: vague and bordering cliché Line6: cliché Line 7/8: see Line 4. Line: 9 cliché Line 10: See line 4. Line 11: why not ev’r more for effect, I mean the poem is shit anyway, might as well go all the way. Line 12: it’s “it’” – also see line 4. Line 13/14/15: could be good if not leaning toward cliché Line 16: stupid. See line 4. Other than that lovely. And such original thinking.
Re: Squeeze it out... by mrpresident	6-Oct-03/10:43 PM
Sad. So many good things can be conjured on the throne and this is what you come up with. It is not even funny. You must be 14 and still laugh when you fart.
Re: "Jump or Burn" by horus8	6-Oct-03/2:13 PM
Wow, top notch product placement. How much did you get paid sitting at your desk coming up with that one. $650? $850.
Re: Some follow marchers- others take time to understand it. by SupremeDreamer	4-Oct-03/7:37 PM
Lovely. And such original thinking.
Re: a comment on Nude pictures of children at work by Shardik	4-Oct-03/7:26 PM
Bummer! I guess it is back to sucking cock for you!!
Re: An Angel from Venice Disappears by DreamerSupreme	3-Oct-03/9:50 PM
Lovely. And such original thinking.
Re: Material Things by thatgirlaquarius	3-Oct-03/9:40 PM
Rockmage would dig this because it breaks the rules of function. A sentence ended? No period, but a capital. Numerous times. And the ellipsoidal to suggest that the thought is infinite. Genius. I want what you guys are smoking.
Re: The Swallower (Oh brother!) by Spanish Devil by Bachus	3-Oct-03/9:36 PM
Cutting edge.
Re: a comment on Manila by poetandknowit	3-Oct-03/1:25 PM
Damn right. That is what 11 years of higher education will get you!
Re: The man, the world by INTRANSIT	3-Oct-03/12:35 PM
natures skyscraper... I like this (even without the apostrophe) and I was digging the poem until if flopped over and turned melodramatic. K.I.S.S.
Re: a comment on water falls by Bill Z Bub	3-Oct-03/12:30 PM
Oh yeah, well I disagree with your disagreement because I want more than the storm, I want the creative metaphor of water on the screen. The water falling. The storm is cliché but the opening metaphor and maybe I took it wrong because now I see the screen door is open. So then maybe the narrator is sitting in a lawn chair in the entrance way drinking a Molson in the rain waiting to sprout mold. Who knows up there in Canada? But the water on the screen and what can be done with that -- well that is what I was talking about. Pilsner is for girls.
Re: The Western World by mrpresident	2-Oct-03/10:48 PM
I really don’t get the sense that you have ever worked a dead-end job in your life, thus when you attempt to write about it you actually have to mention the phrase instead of creating or conjuring a metaphor that would get the job done with the desired effect. But since the experience is not there you would never think to come up with that. Nor do you even understand the concept of buying or selling or what is bought or sold by those who sell and buy. And then, yet more rhetorical questions. Think about it.
Re: Broken Mirror by Artemis745	2-Oct-03/10:40 PM
Young people are trapped in an endless cycle of rhetorical questions. Bummer. And, seven years bad luck. Look what it has done to the Cubs and all because of a curse put on the team by a tavern owner who could not bring his goat to a World Series game. Now there is something to think about next time you pick up the pencil.
Re: Death by Artemis745	2-Oct-03/10:29 PM
Ha, you had me going there for a minute.
Re: The Thought Of It by Christof	2-Oct-03/10:05 PM
Damn I love this poem. I think I love you Christof.
Re: a comment on water falls by Bill Z Bub	2-Oct-03/10:02 PM
But here, I will up the score just to aid with the self esteem.
Re: a comment on water falls by Bill Z Bub	2-Oct-03/9:59 PM
The rating is irrelevant. It is not about achieving a high score, but about writing a good poem. The attaching a number part is cute, but you are beyond that. I gave it a five because that is where it is: still with a chance, somewhere in the middle of succeeding or failing. Like I said, the metaphor of rainwater coming through a screen says a good number of things.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	2-Oct-03/9:52 PM
This poem needs nothing learned for a bit of roasting and why is everybody all of a sudden reading it? Doan is a picture taker (somewhat successful) who has a book out that puts naked woman in stereotypical domestic situations (i.e. ironing, cooking, laundry, etc, etc.) Quite genderistic you may say, but the base or instinctual sexuality is so convincing that is blows you away. Other than that the poem sucks and I do not know how to fix it yet.
Re: Why I can't stop laughing at you! by Bachus	2-Oct-03/8:55 PM
Cutting edge, dude.