poemranker ::Manila by poetandknowit

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Free verse № 65469

Manila

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Sep 2003 · Edited 16 Sep 2003 · 7 comments

Today, through the usual haze collecting off the bay and undeniable stink of shanties what is above remains clear. The streets still reek of cheap business and squawk with the buying and selling of the exotic dead, fever red buses scream and fight to breathe along the Romas inhaling black spit of hoary late models too old but to creak with choking bicyclists and rickshaws pedaling giddy tourists on goodwill jaunts along the slithers and scattered patches of asphalt. Today, the whores stay home and count blessings while washing feet in buckets of dirty water, waiting for the whistle and howl of calling boats, and school children wrestle along hallways tugging weighted backpacks filled with sketchbooks of home worked attempts to pencil a heart on paper that beats stronger than August typhoons.

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7 comments

[8] Bachus 16-Sep-03/8:21 PM Reply
The End was a bit choppier for me than the rest, but I enjoyed it. 8.
[10] Caducus 17-Sep-03/2:44 AM Reply
I can picture you sitting there absorbing the sights and sounds that fuelled the mood so well expressed in this poem.

Yes, I absolutely love this.

(God its nice being nice aint it?) ^10^
[10] Caducus 17-Sep-03/2:45 AM Reply
Ever heard of hitting a nail on its head?



rickshaws pedaling giddy tourists on goodwill jaunts
along the slithers and scattered patches of asphalt.

[10] nentwined 17-Sep-03/1:58 PM Reply
perfection. [[eloquently painted]]
[9] INTRANSIT 2-Oct-03/6:37 AM Reply
Still angry children dump 1s. Good to see you drop by from time to time. This one has inspired me to try something new. details. ha! imagine that.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 3-Oct-03/1:19 PM Reply
ace line breaks
[n/a] poetandknowit › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 3-Oct-03/1:25 PM Reply
Damn right. That is what 11 years of higher education will get you!