regarding some deleted poem...	21-Feb-06/3:12 PM
Try thinking of an actual event and describing it completely. And if you're going to self-vote, why not give yourself a 10? You deserve it!
Re: Pretty Little Dead Thing by JAM	21-Feb-06/3:14 PM
If you must rhyme, consider rhyming words that no sensible person would try to rhyme, but in a way that seems obvious after the fact.
Re: Watercolor Fairy by Scarlett	21-Feb-06/3:17 PM
Try to avoid reversing normal word order, like in "blessings she bequeaths". And easy way to do that - to, say, get "bequeaths" at the end of the line instead of blessings - is to enjamb. Try: Around the painting, she bequeaths blessings, plots colors, running free By splashes of rain droplets from her eyes Hues battle for territory
Re: Eden to Galillee (by Caducus) by Mona Lisa	21-Feb-06/3:20 PM
Looks like Caducus to me.
Re: lost souls by aamir_trichy	21-Feb-06/3:22 PM
Not bad, but you should know most poetry written in English is not like this.
Re: First Unborn Sun by Been Here Before	21-Feb-06/3:24 PM
I don't understand any of the lines that rhyme with "sight".
Re: Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	21-Feb-06/3:25 PM
The second stanza's good, minus Minerva.
Re: During the Grace by jahnotis	21-Feb-06/3:34 PM
To be grammatical, "neither" would have to come before "suffered", not before "lights". Alternately, you can say (somewhat archaicly) "neither did the lights suffer, nor did they shine..." (note the tense.) "tarry" should be "tarried". Or the whole thing should be in present tense, one or the other. "realized" in the sense you've got it means, like, "I realized my dreams". That is, "my dreams came into being". I think you mean "recognized the thorn's approach." And you ought to drop "vulnerably" from the next line, since flanks being open MEANS something's vulnerable; and again, "remain" should be past tense. Third stanza: Again, try to keep the tense consistent. By the third and fourth stanzas, the "nor did they shine" lines seem more for rhyme than making sense. That said, the last stanza's the best, although I think, politically speaking, this poem is tripe.
Re: The chestnut by richa	21-Feb-06/3:35 PM
Better.
Re: On Looking Back by Dovina	24-Feb-06/3:04 PM
This so-called limerick doesn't use any "limerick words" at all. :-( -not funny-
Re: Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	25-Feb-06/12:02 PM
Whatever your poetic inspiration was, it's never a good idea to write a poem with 7 lines in a row using the same rhyme. You can be as clever as you want, and odds are it's still going to sound bad. And I agree with ecargo, your points are a little overstated. It's nice that you made many of them part of a dialogue, but, to me, it doesn't work. Some tightening, shortening, and ambiguity seem in order. Also, (a minor thing,) the anthology-style line-numbering bothers me.
Re: Harp Song of the Prawne Men by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	27-Feb-06/11:28 AM
Do you have something sound and philosophical about the argument 'If I don't kill person X, he will kill me'? The context is, obviously, Arabs. The person I'm arguing with is a loon, so it's not likely to make much of a difference. Hey, thanks bunches! Tenderly, Curious Hopeless Introvert in Alaska
Re: There by Dovina	1-Mar-06/1:17 PM
Maybe you should pick a different "there". Yours sounds like it sucks, but that's no reason to give up on theres in general.
Re: =, <>, & . . . by Dovina	2-Mar-06/10:39 AM
A new movement in philosophy, called Experimental Philosophy or x-phi, seeks to test so-called fundamental intuitions (ie, "common sense") against real people's intuitions. That is, to remove philosophy from its remove from the real world. For example, it's commonly held that moral responsibility requires free will. If you're forced to kill someone against your will, it's not your fault, right? X-phi researchers decided to test that against real data. They presented the following scenario to two groups: Bill and his wife are flying home from vacation with their friend Frank, who is having an affair with Bill's wife. Bill knows about this. Kidnappers inject Bill with a drug that forces him to obey orders, then tell him to shoot Frank in the head. He does. The first group is told that Bill has long wanted Frank dead, on account of the affair, and grieves very little. The second group is told that Bill hates what he's done. According to traditional philosophy, Bill is not responsible for Frank's death; but in the x-phi study, the first group said that Bill DID deserve the blame for the killing; the second group said he didn't. In another example, UNC-CH students were asked the following questions: If a businessman interested only in profits knowingly harms the environment, should we say he did so intentionally? What if he knowingly HELPS the environment? The students said yes to the first question, no to the second. In another example having to do with intentionality, a man tries to shoot his aunt, misfires, but somehow gets lucky and hits her anyway. Most people say he killed her intentionally, even though he didn't really have the skill to. It's enough that he wanted to. The argument against x-phi is that respondents may be deciding based on the language of the questions, rather than the philosophical principles involved. For example, here's a psychology experiment you can try yourself. 1. Imagine that the US is preparing for the outbreak of an unusual Asian disease, which is expected to kill 600 people. Two alternative programs to combat the disease have been proposed. Assume that the exact scientific estimates of the consequences of the programs are as follows: - If Program A is adopted, 200 people will be saved. - If Program B is adopted, there is 1/3 probability that 600 people will be saved, and 2/3 probability that no people will be saved. Which of the two programs would you favor? 2. In the same Asian-disease scenario as the previous question's, two different programs are proposed: - If Program C is adopted 400 people will die. - If Program D is adopted there is 1/3 probability that nobody will die, and 2/3 probability that 600 people will die. Which of THESE two programs would you favor?
Re: War on Iraq by Dhanesh M Kumar	7-Mar-06/9:55 AM
Inta 3raqi? 3rab?
Re: Navy Pier by matt door	11-Mar-06/10:03 AM
Stop posting this same poem. Are you ready to be Mature now, Doug?
Re: Emo Kid by Fayt	13-Mar-06/8:57 AM
Not a limerick or funny. Please stop reposting this.
Re: Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:01 AM
You're doing it again and you know it. And you know I know it. There is nothing eternal about 183. Nor is there any point thinking so. In short, you fail in the most eternal possible respect.
Re: Desolation by Beyond_Dreams	13-Mar-06/9:02 AM
You don't seem to have ever read actual poetry.
Re: i realize by http://robynhood	13-Mar-06/9:06 AM
Invest in education. It makes relationships so much less blurry.